Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetition, and add a brief reason or typical activity to enrich the answer. Use linking words (e.g., "so", "because") to connect ideas and limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I go to the library about twice a week. I usually visit on Tuesdays because I'm off that day, and I also pop in if I finish work early to study or borrow books.

제안: Organize into a clear sequence and avoid repetition. Use linking words (first, then, finally) and combine short actions into one coherent sentence. Mention a specific example or favourite genre to add detail.

예시: First, I get a coffee from the cafeteria, then I go to the fiction section and pick a novel. After that I sit in a quiet corner and read—I especially enjoy contemporary novels about everyday life.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons without filler words. Replace informal contractions like "wanna" with more appropriate phrases. Keep it concise and consider adding a short contrast to show change if relevant.

예시: No, not much. I preferred playing outside with friends and disliked studying, so the library didn't appeal to me then. Now my habits are different and I enjoy reading there.

제안: Answer directly and use clear grammar. Start with a general statement, then give specific reasons or examples. Reduce hesitation words and correct sentence structure (e.g., "Some schools make it mandatory").

예시: Many Chinese schools require students to spend time in the library, so lots of children visit regularly. However, outside school, only some kids choose to go voluntarily to read for pleasure.

× Yes I do. I often go to. I go to the library twice a week, so uh, I'm usually off Monday and Tuesday, so I try to go on Tuesday and also if I finish work early during the weekdays I go.

✓ Yes, I do. I often go to the library. I go twice a week. I'm usually off on Monday and Tuesday, so I try to go on Tuesday. Also, if I finish work early during the weekdays, I go.

Errors: sentence fragments and omitted objects cause unclear present tense usage. Suggestions: include the object 'the library' after 'go to' and split long run-on sentences into clear present simple statements. Use 'on' with days of the week and add commas for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I usually take a coffee from the cafeteria at the library upon arrival.

✓ I usually get a coffee from the cafeteria in the library when I arrive.

'Take a coffee' is understandable but 'get a coffee' or 'have a coffee' is more natural. Also 'upon arrival' is formal; 'when I arrive' fits conversational present-tense narrative following present simple usage. Use 'in' or 'at' consistently; 'in the library' is natural here. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Then I will head to the fiction section and I I choose a book and I sit down, drink my tea or coffee and read the book.

✓ Then I head to the fiction section, choose a book, sit down, have my tea or coffee, and read.

Mixing 'will' with habitual present actions is incorrect. For routine actions use present simple: 'I head', 'I choose'. Also remove redundant pronoun and simplify parallel verbs. Use 'have' rather than 'drink' for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Not really. I I didn't like the idea of going to the library when I was a kid because I was always out with my friends and I hated studying itself, so I didn't wanna do further study at the library.

✓ Not really. I didn't like the idea of going to the library when I was a kid because I was always out with my friends and I hated studying, so I didn't want to do further studying at the library.

Use full form 'didn't want' instead of colloquial 'didn't wanna' in a formal correction. 'Studying itself' is unnatural; use 'studying' or 'study'. Also 'further study' should be 'further studying' or 'further studies'. Ensure past simple throughout for past habits. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Used to do the some schools, uh, make it mandatory to spend time in libraries, uh, for kids.

✓ Some schools used to make it mandatory for kids to spend time in libraries.

Original word order is incorrect and missing subject. Move 'some schools' to subject position and use 'used to' correctly before verb. Place 'for kids' after 'mandatory' or use 'make it mandatory for kids to...'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× But uh, some, uh, some kids voluntarily go to library and read books.

✓ But some kids voluntarily go to the library and read books.

Remove disfluencies and add the definite article 'the' before 'library'. The sentence structure requires 'the library' as a specific place. Also avoid repeated words and filler sounds for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26