Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors such as "I'm so busy to go" and "workload is used." Try to use simpler, correct structures and be more concise. Also, avoid redundancy and improve coherence by using linking words. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific reasons and examples.

예시: I don't often go to the library because I am usually busy with work. However, when I need reliable academic journals that I can't find online, I visit the library to access those resources.

제안: Your answer covers the question but could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating phrases like "as I said before." Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, correct minor errors such as "there are sometimes when" to "sometimes I go." Provide specific examples to enrich your answer.

예시: Usually, I visit the library to find reliable academic journals and other resources. Sometimes, I also go there to relax and join group activities like journal clubs and study groups, which help me learn more effectively.

제안: Your answer has many hesitations and filler words like "uh," which affect fluency. Try to speak more smoothly and clearly. Also, improve sentence structure and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and provide specific details about the activities you did.

예시: When I was a child, there was no library near my home, so it was hard to visit one. However, on weekends, I used to go to the library with my parents to participate in activities suitable for children, such as reading sessions and educational games.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear expressions, such as "I don't know the their purpose" and "they will they goes go." Try to use correct grammar and clearer sentences. Also, avoid repeating words and be more specific about your observations. Use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: During my last trip to China, I noticed that many children often visit libraries. Although I am not sure about their exact reasons, I believe they go there to join various activities and study programs.

× Actually, I'm so busy to go to the library.

✓ Actually, I'm so busy that I can't go to the library.

The phrase 'I'm so busy to go' is incorrect because 'busy' is not followed by 'to' plus a verb. Instead, 'busy' is usually followed by 'that' plus a clause or 'with' plus a noun. Here, 'so busy that I can't go' correctly expresses the meaning.

× I often engaged in my works, so workload is used and I can't have much time to go to the library.

✓ I often engage in my work, so the workload is heavy and I don't have much time to go to the library.

The sentence mixes past tense 'engaged' with present context 'I can't have'. Since the student is talking about a habitual action, present tense 'engage' is appropriate. Also, 'works' should be 'work' (uncountable), and 'workload is used' is incorrect; 'workload is heavy' or similar is better.

× However, to find some academic journals or reliable resources, whenever it is difficult to find it online, I go to the library.

✓ However, to find some academic journals or reliable resources, whenever it is difficult to find them online, I go to the library.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to plural 'journals or resources'. The correct plural pronoun is 'them'.

× I often engaged in my works, so workload is used and I can't have much time to go to the library.

✓ I often engage in my work, so the workload is heavy and I don't have much time to go to the library.

The phrase 'engaged in my works' is awkward; 'engage in my work' is more natural. Also, 'workload is used' is incorrect; 'workload is heavy' or 'workload is high' is appropriate.

× There are some journal clubs as well as some study groups, so I joined over there.

✓ There are some journal clubs as well as some study groups, so I joined them there.

The phrase 'joined over there' is awkward and incomplete. The verb 'join' usually takes an object, so 'joined them' is needed. 'There' indicates location.

× When I was growing up, it was very difficult for me to find a library because, uh, there was no library in a convenient location, uh, from my living area.

✓ When I was growing up, it was very difficult for me to find a library because there was no library in a convenient location near my living area.

The phrase 'from my living area' is incorrect preposition usage; 'near my living area' or 'close to my living area' is correct.

× But uh, I, uh, used to, uh, go to the library with my parents on the weekends, uh, to find some activities which are appropriate for me.

✓ But I used to go to the library with my parents on the weekends to find some activities that were appropriate for me.

The phrase 'to find some activities which are appropriate for me' is awkward in past context; 'that were appropriate for me' matches past tense. Also, 'which' can be replaced by 'that' for defining clauses.

× As I observed in my last trip to China, I found that there were so many kids who often go to the library, but I don't know the their purpose.

✓ As I observed in my last trip to China, I found that there were so many kids who often go to the library, but I don't know their purpose.

The phrase 'the their purpose' contains redundant articles. Only 'their purpose' is correct.

× Still, I think they will they goes go to the library to participate in different activities or academic activities.

✓ Still, I think they will go to the library to participate in different activities or academic activities.

The phrase 'they will they goes go' is incorrect and redundant. The correct form is 'they will go' because 'will' is a modal verb followed by the base form of the verb.