Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by saying "in the afternoon" instead of "in afternoon" and avoid redundancy like "either read the books". Also, keep your answer concise and clear within 5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually go to the library in the afternoon to study or read books. I especially enjoy novels and comic books, so the library is my favourite place to spend my afternoons.

제안: Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly, for example, "because" is good, but avoid phrases like "or else" which sound unnatural. Also, try to avoid repeating the same idea and be more specific about what you study or read.

예시: I usually read novels and comic books in the library because they help me relax and improve my imagination. Besides reading, I also study subjects like history and science there, which makes the library my favourite place.

제안: Make your sentences more natural by saying "when I was a child" and "when I became a teenager at 16". Avoid redundancy like "in a teenage" and try to be more concise and clear.

예시: No, I didn't usually visit the library when I was a child because I wasn't very interested in reading. I started going to the library when I became a teenager at 16.

제안: Improve grammar by saying "children are not very interested in reading" and avoid awkward phrases like "developing learning". Also, try to use linking words like "however" to make your answer more coherent.

예시: No, Chinese children usually don't go to the library because they are not very interested in reading at a young age. However, as they grow older, around 16, they start to develop an interest in learning and begin visiting the library more often.

× Yes, I usually go to the library in afternoon to study or either read the books.

✓ Yes, I usually go to the library in the afternoon to study or read books.

The phrase 'in afternoon' is incorrect; it should be 'in the afternoon' because 'afternoon' is a specific time of day requiring the definite article 'the'. Also, 'either' is unnecessary here and 'the books' should be 'books' as it refers to books in general, not specific ones.

× So yeah, library is my go to place and my afternoon.

✓ So yeah, the library is my go-to place in the afternoon.

The sentence lacks the definite article 'the' before 'library'. Also, 'go to place' should be hyphenated as 'go-to place'. The phrase 'and my afternoon' is unclear and should be rephrased to 'in the afternoon' to indicate the time.

× I often read books or else I study when I go to the library.

✓ I often read books or study when I go to the library.

'Or else' is not appropriate here; 'or' alone is sufficient to connect the two activities. 'Or else' implies a consequence or alternative which is not intended in this context.

× No, when I was a child I didn't usually visit a library because I wasn't much interested in reading books at that particular age.

✓ No, when I was a child I didn't usually visit the library because I wasn't very interested in reading books at that particular age.

'A library' should be 'the library' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Also, 'much interested' is incorrect; 'very interested' is the correct collocation.

× No, Chinese kids don't go to the library as they are child and children are not much interested into reading and learning at such an early age.

✓ No, Chinese kids don't go to the library as they are children and are not very interested in reading and learning at such an early age.

'They are child' is incorrect; it should be 'they are children' to match plural subject. Also, 'interested into' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'interested in'. 'Much interested' should be 'very interested' for proper collocation.