Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some mistakes. Try to give a clear topic sentence and avoid unnecessary words like 'nerd' or 'nurse' which may confuse the listener. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with 'Yes, I go to the library almost every day because I enjoy reading books, especially about marketing.'

예시: Yes, I go to the library almost every day because I enjoy reading books, especially about marketing. I like to spend several hours there to immerse myself in the materials and improve my knowledge.

제안: Your answer is confusing and has grammatical errors. Please try to organize your ideas clearly and use correct verb forms. Use linking words like 'and' or 'also' to connect your activities. For example, 'I usually bring my laptop to the library to study languages and do exercises after school. If I have extra time, I also like to read books there.'

예시: I usually bring my laptop to the library to study languages and do exercises after school. Also, if I have some free time, I like to read books until the library closes.

제안: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to give a direct answer first, then explain with clear reasons. Avoid repeating words and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'. For example, 'No, I did not go to the library when I was a kid because my family was poor and we lived in a rural area without a modern library.'

예시: No, I did not go to the library when I was a kid because my family was poor and we lived in a rural area where there was no modern library available.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains irrelevant or incorrect information. Please answer directly and clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, 'I think Chinese kids in urban areas often go to the library because they have easy access. Also, many Asian people value education and enjoy reading.'

예시: I think Chinese kids in urban areas often go to the library because they have easy access. Also, many Asian people value education and enjoy reading books in libraries.

× Yeah, I'm such a nurse, so I'm spending time.

✓ Yeah, I'm such a nerd, so I spend time.

The word 'nurse' is incorrect here; the student likely meant 'nerd'. Also, 'I'm spending time' is awkward; 'I spend time' is more natural in this context.

× I'm, I love spending hours in the libraries to immerse myself in the some books, especially in marketing.

✓ I love spending hours in the library to immerse myself in some books, especially on marketing.

Use 'the library' when referring to a specific place generally. 'The some books' is incorrect; 'some books' is correct. Also, 'in marketing' should be 'on marketing' when referring to a subject.

× Well, I think it brings my laptop in there to learning the languages or doing to exercise after school, after school time.

✓ Well, I think I bring my laptop there to learn languages or do exercises after school.

Incorrect preposition 'brings my laptop in there' should be 'bring my laptop there'. 'To learning' and 'doing to exercise' are incorrect; correct forms are 'to learn' and 'do exercises'.

× Yeah, I'm and if I have a little time later, I will spending time to read till the end of library.

✓ Yeah, and if I have a little time later, I will spend time reading until the library closes.

'I will spending' is incorrect; it should be 'I will spend'. 'Till the end of library' is unnatural; 'until the library closes' is clearer.

× Since when I was a kid, My, my, my family is so poor and we live in the in the rural.

✓ Since I was a kid, my family was very poor and we lived in a rural area.

Use past tense 'was' and 'lived' to match the time frame. 'In the rural' is incorrect; 'in a rural area' is correct.

× Yeah. You know, this is not a modern, if not modern, it's not, it's it's not how the the the library open or something.

✓ Yeah. You know, this is not modern; the library was not open or anything like that.

'Not a modern' is incorrect; 'not modern' is correct. The phrase is unclear and redundant; simplified correction improves clarity.

× Shiny kids. I don't think so because I'm sleeping in Vietnam, but I guess I'm Chinese.

✓ Chinese kids? I don't think so because I am living in Vietnam, but I guess if they are Chinese...

'Shiny kids' is likely a mishearing of 'Chinese kids'. 'I'm sleeping' is incorrect; should be 'I am living'. Pronouns need correction for clarity.

× If they sleep in the urban areas, they can access to libraries easily.

✓ If they live in urban areas, they can access libraries easily.

'Sleep in the urban areas' is incorrect; 'live in urban areas' is correct. 'Access to libraries' should be 'access libraries' without 'to'.

× And the the Asian people, they also love library because the Chinese is so smart I think.

✓ And Asian people also love libraries because Chinese people are very smart, I think.

'The the Asian people' is redundant; 'Asian people' is correct. 'Love library' should be 'love libraries'. 'The Chinese is' should be 'Chinese people are'.