Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Избегайте повторов и грамматических ошибок, используйте связующие слова для плавности речи.

예시: I don't often go to the library because I find it easier to search for information online. However, sometimes I visit the library to enjoy the peaceful atmosphere and the charm of old books, which I find quite meditative.

제안: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова и уточняйте детали для лучшего понимания.

예시: Usually, I borrow drama books from the library and find a quiet corner to relax. Then, I immerse myself in the fascinating stories, which helps me unwind.

제안: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и неясности. Следует использовать правильные времена и более чётко выражать мысли.

예시: Yes, when I was a child, I often went to the school library. I usually borrowed two books that I needed for my studies.

제안: Ответ должен быть более чётким и связным. Избегайте повторов и старайтесь давать конкретные примеры.

예시: I'm not sure about Chinese children, but in Russia, kids don't often visit libraries because most books are available online through digital platforms.

× But sometimes I visit library just to deep into this atmosphere of old books and to be in the silent ways without anyone.

✓ But sometimes I visit the library just to dive into this atmosphere of old books and to be in the silent aisles without anyone.

The phrase 'deep into' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'dive into' when expressing immersion. Also, 'silent ways' is incorrect; the correct term is 'silent aisles' when referring to parts of a library. Additionally, the definite article 'the' is needed before 'library'.

× In the library, I usually take drama books and I sit into the silent edge and just relax and try to immerse into the interesting story of this book.

✓ In the library, I usually take drama books and I sit on the silent edge and just relax and try to immerse myself in the interesting story of this book.

The preposition 'into' is incorrect after 'sit'; the correct preposition is 'on' when referring to sitting on a place. Also, 'immerse into' should be 'immerse myself in' to correctly express engaging with the story.

× I usually bought 2 borrowed books which I was needed for my studying in school and also it was our kind of.

✓ I usually borrowed 2 books which I needed for my studying in school, and also it was our kind of tradition.

The verb 'bought' is incorrect because borrowing books does not involve buying. The correct verb is 'borrowed'. Also, 'which I was needed' is incorrect; it should be 'which I needed'. The sentence is incomplete and unclear at the end; adding 'tradition' clarifies the meaning.

× I used to go to the library to school library.

✓ I used to go to the school library.

The phrase 'to the library to school library' is redundant and incorrect. The correct phrase is 'to the school library'.

× most of our most of the books they can find in the Internet on on their online Diaries.

✓ most of our books can be found on the Internet on their online diaries.

The phrase 'in the Internet' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on the Internet'. Also, 'on on' is a repetition error. 'Diaries' likely refers to 'diaries' or 'diaries' is a mistranslation; assuming 'diaries' means 'diaries' or 'blogs', the sentence is corrected accordingly.