Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. For example, instead of saying "there aren't libraries located near in my house," say "there aren't any libraries near my house." Also, avoid informal contractions like 'cause in formal speaking. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I don't go to the library anymore because there aren't any libraries near my house. Instead, I prefer reading archives and online books since it's more convenient.

제안: Improve grammar and clarity by using correct verb tenses and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, say "I usually went to the library to do my assignments and research. Also, I used the computer there to help with my research."

예시: When I was in college, I usually went to the library to do my assignments and research. Also, I used the computer there to assist with my studies.

제안: Use simpler and clearer sentence structures. Avoid double negatives and repeated words. For example, say "I didn't have the opportunity to go to a library when I was young because there wasn't a library near where I lived."

예시: I didn't have the chance to visit a library when I was a child because there wasn't one near my home.

제안: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar. For example, instead of "their school systems is one of the most notorious," say "their school system is well-known for its rigor." Also, avoid repeating words like "they they."

예시: Yes, I believe Chinese kids often go to the library because they are very studious. Their school system is well-known for being rigorous, so they read many books and have access to numerous libraries.

× Maybe this is mainly because there aren't libraries located near in my house and I prefer reading archives and online books 'cause it's more convenient rather than going to the library.

✓ Maybe this is mainly because there aren't libraries located near my house and I prefer reading archives and online books 'cause it's more convenient than going to the library.

The preposition 'near' should not be followed by 'in' when indicating proximity to a place. Also, 'more convenient rather than' is incorrect; the correct comparative structure is 'more convenient than'. In English (Philippines), we say 'near my house' not 'near in my house', and use 'more convenient than' to compare two things.

× Back when I was a student in college, I usually go to the library to make my assignments, research, and since there's a computer available there, I usually use the computer for still research.

✓ Back when I was a student in college, I usually went to the library to do my assignments and research, and since there was a computer available there, I usually used the computer for research.

The sentence refers to past habitual actions, so the verbs should be in the past tense ('went', 'did', 'used'). Also, 'make my assignments' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'do my assignments'. 'Still research' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'research' alone suffices. In English (Philippines), when talking about past habits, we use past tense verbs to match the time frame.

× I hadn't had any opportunity to go to a library when I was young because in my city I think there is no library conveniently located where where I was living.

✓ I didn't have any opportunity to go to a library when I was young because in my city I think there was no library conveniently located where I was living.

The past perfect 'hadn't had' is unnecessary here; simple past 'didn't have' is appropriate. Also, 'there is no library' should be in past tense 'there was no library' to match the past time frame. The repeated word 'where' is a typo and should be corrected. In English (Philippines), we use simple past tense to describe past situations and avoid unnecessary past perfect unless indicating a sequence of past events.

× I think they're very studious kids and their school systems is one of the most notorious I have heard as a Filipino kid.

✓ I think they're very studious kids and their school system is one of the most notorious I have heard of as a Filipino kid.

The subject 'school system' is singular, so the verb should be 'is'. Also, 'school systems' (plural) with 'is' (singular) is incorrect. The phrase 'most notorious I have heard' is incomplete; it should be 'most notorious I have heard of'. In English (Philippines), subject-verb agreement is important; singular subjects take singular verbs, and prepositions like 'of' are necessary in such expressions.

× I have no idea what they they study, but I think so.

✓ I have no idea what they study, but I think so.

The repeated pronoun 'they' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'they'. In English (Philippines), avoid repeating pronouns unnecessarily to maintain clarity and correctness.