Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of saying 'I often go to the library to have some reading material,' say 'I often visit the library to find reading materials for my thesis.' Also, use correct article usage like 'an emerging category' instead of 'a emerging category.'

예시: Yes, I often visit the library to find reading materials for my thesis work. I especially enjoy reading books on self-help groups, which is an emerging category nowadays.

제안: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words properly to make your answer coherent. For example, say 'I usually read materials related to my thesis, and I also bring my laptop to work on assignments related to my degree.'

예시: I usually read materials related to my thesis, and I also bring my laptop to work on assignments related to my degree.

제안: Focus on correct tense usage and avoid redundancy. For example, say 'When I was a kid, I loved going to the library because our school had a large one. We also had a dedicated library period during school hours.'

예시: When I was a kid, I loved going to the library because our school had a large one. We also had a dedicated library period during school hours.

제안: Avoid repeating phrases and be more specific. For example, say 'Yes, Chinese students often visit the library because they are very studious and value education.'

예시: Yes, Chinese students often visit the library because they are very studious and value education.

× I also love reading the books, especially the self help groups which is a emerging category nowadays.

✓ I also love reading books, especially self-help books which are an emerging category nowadays.

The phrase 'self help groups' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'self-help books' as the student is referring to a category of books. Also, 'which is a emerging category' should be 'which are an emerging category' because 'books' is plural, so the verb and article must agree accordingly.

× I moreover I take the my laptop along with me to have some work on the to have to have some work which is related to my degree of course.

✓ I also take my laptop along with me to do some work related to my degree, of course.

The sentence has redundant phrases ('I moreover I', 'to have some work on the to have to have some work') and incorrect use of articles ('the my laptop'). The correction removes redundancy and corrects the article usage. 'Do some work' is more appropriate than 'have some work on' in this context.

× When I was a kid, I vividly remember I love to go to the library that days as there was a huge library in our school too and I often go there to read some books and some other materials and we also had a library period of in our in our school.

✓ When I was a kid, I vividly remember I loved to go to the library those days as there was a huge library in our school too and I often went there to read some books and other materials. We also had a library period in our school.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'I love' should be 'I loved' to match the past context. 'That days' should be 'those days' for correct demonstrative adjective usage. 'I often go' should be 'I often went' to maintain past tense consistency. Also, 'library period of in our in our school' is corrected to 'library period in our school' for clarity and correctness.

× we also had a library period of in our in our school.

✓ We also had a library period in our school.

The phrase 'library period of in our in our school' contains redundant and incorrect prepositions. The correct preposition is 'in' to indicate location, and redundancy is removed.

× In my perspective, I believe in my perspective, I believe that the Chinese students are very bright and they are also very studious.

✓ In my perspective, I believe that Chinese students are very bright and also very studious.

The phrase 'In my perspective, I believe in my perspective, I believe' is repetitive. Also, 'the Chinese students' is better as 'Chinese students' when speaking generally. The correction removes redundancy and article misuse.