Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it can be improved by avoiding redundancy and making the sentences more natural. For example, "I usually go to the library about once a month" and "I don't go there as much as I used to" are somewhat repetitive. Also, the phrase "I like to experience" is unclear and should be more specific. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I usually visit the library about once a month. Although I used to go more often in the past, the Internet now makes information easily accessible. However, I enjoy the atmosphere of the library, so I am trying to visit more frequently.

제안: Your answer provides good content but is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Also, the last sentence is incomplete and unclear. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid redundancy. Make sure your sentences are complete and clear.

예시: In the library, I usually search for older books because they contain unique information that is not available in newer publications. This makes my visits very enjoyable and rewarding.

제안: Your answer is relevant and personal, which is good. However, the phrase "around maybe 1:00 almost every day" is unclear and could be more precise. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I went to the library often as a child. It played a significant role in shaping who I am today and is an important part of my childhood memories. I used to visit the library near my house almost every day after school.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains some awkward phrasing such as "More obviously not today anymore". Try to use clearer and more natural expressions. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Nowadays, Chinese children do not visit libraries as often as before. In the past, going to the library was a popular hobby and a form of entertainment. However, with the rise of the Internet and social media, many children prefer spending time online instead.

× But I like to experience and I'm trying to visit libraries more often.

✓ But I like the experience and I'm trying to visit libraries more often.

The phrase 'like to experience' is incomplete and unclear. The correct expression is 'like the experience' to convey enjoyment. Also, 'trying to visit' is correct as it indicates an ongoing effort.

× So that's what makes my visits to the. Very enjoyable.

✓ So that's what makes my visits there very enjoyable.

The original sentence is fragmented and incomplete. 'Visits to the.' is incomplete and should be 'visits there' to complete the thought. Also, 'Very' should be lowercase and connected to the sentence.

× I grew up visiting a library next to our house around maybe 1:00 almost every day.

✓ I grew up visiting a library near our house at around 1:00 almost every day.

The preposition 'next to' is acceptable but 'near' is more natural here. Also, 'at around 1:00' is the correct prepositional phrase for time. 'Around maybe' is redundant; 'around' suffices.

× More obviously not today anymore, but in the past, kids used to visit libraries a lot because it was a form of entertainment and it was a hobby for so many kids.

✓ Obviously, not so much today anymore, but in the past, kids used to visit libraries a lot because it was a form of entertainment and a hobby for many kids.

The phrase 'More obviously not today anymore' is awkward and incorrect. 'Obviously, not so much today anymore' is clearer. Also, 'so many kids' is better as 'many kids' in this context.