Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow by linking ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'I love borrowing books from the library instead of buying one as I think it's more eco friendly,' you could say 'I prefer borrowing books from the library because it's more eco-friendly and helps me save money.'

예시: Yes, I often go to the library because I prefer borrowing books rather than buying them, as it's more eco-friendly and helps me save money.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and natural phrasing. Use a clear topic sentence and link your ideas logically. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'doing my thing.' Instead, specify what you do and how the library helps you. For example, 'I usually borrow books and study there because the quiet environment helps me concentrate better.'

예시: I usually borrow books and study at the library because the quiet environment helps me concentrate and improve my self-study.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat unclear. Use past tense consistently and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Also, avoid incomplete sentences. For example, 'Yes, I often went to the library as a child because there were few facilities in my community. The library was a comfortable place with air conditioning and many books to read.'

예시: Yes, I often went to the library as a child because there were few facilities in my community. The library was a comfortable place with air conditioning and many books to read.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains repetition and awkward phrasing. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to improve coherence. For example, 'Unfortunately, many Chinese children face academic pressure, and their parents often make them focus on past exam papers rather than encouraging them to read books in the library.'

예시: Unfortunately, many Chinese children face academic pressure, and their parents often make them focus on past exam papers rather than encouraging them to read books in the library.

× No problem borrowing books.

✓ There is no problem borrowing books.

The original sentence lacks a verb to form a complete sentence. Adding 'There is' corrects the sentence structure and properly uses the modal verb context.

× I also love to go to the library for self study purposes because I think going to library help me to be more concentrated of doing my thing and help me to self study better.

✓ I also love to go to the library for self-study purposes because I think going to the library helps me to concentrate more on what I am doing and helps me to study better by myself.

The verb 'help' should be in the third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'going to the library'. Also, 'concentrated of doing my thing' is incorrect; it should be 'concentrate more on what I am doing'. 'Self study' should be hyphenated as 'self-study' when used as an adjective.

× Yes, I go to the library when I was a kid actually very oftenly because there wasn't a lot of different facility in my community and which makes library a great option for me to stay in with air conditioner and books to for me to read and also I can.

✓ Yes, I went to the library very often when I was a kid because there weren't many different facilities in my community, which made the library a great option for me to stay in with air conditioning and books to read.

The verb 'go' should be in the past tense 'went' to match the past time frame. 'Oftenly' is not a correct adverb; 'often' is correct. 'Facility' should be plural 'facilities' to match 'many'. 'Makes' should be past tense 'made' to agree with the past context. 'Air conditioner' should be 'air conditioning'. The sentence was also restructured for clarity and completeness.

× Unfortunately though because a lot of Chinese kids have a pressure academic pressure and their parents forced them to do a lot of academic stuff like past papers instead of immersing them them in the library for books.

✓ Unfortunately, many Chinese kids face academic pressure, and their parents force them to do a lot of academic work like past papers instead of immersing them in the library with books.

The phrase 'a pressure academic pressure' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'academic pressure'. The verb 'forced' should be 'force' to agree with the present tense context. The repeated 'them them' is a typo and should be corrected to a single 'them'. 'Academic stuff' is vague; 'academic work' is more appropriate. 'Immersing them them in the library for books' is awkward; 'immersing them in the library with books' is clearer.