Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and negative self-descriptions. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: No, I don't often go to the library because it's quite far from my home. Instead, I prefer reading books at home where I feel more comfortable.

제안: Clarify your answer by using complete sentences and avoid unclear phrases like 'make some vision'. Use linking words to explain why you choose the library.

예시: I usually study in the self-learning room at the library because it is quiet, which helps me concentrate better than at home where it is often noisy.

제안: Improve your answer by using correct verb tenses and more natural expressions. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words to connect your feelings and activities.

예시: Yes, my mum often took me to the library when I was a child because I enjoyed reading detective stories. I always felt happy and comfortable there.

제안: Make your answer clearer by using more precise vocabulary and sentence structure. Avoid vague phrases like 'knowledge of studying' and 'good organisations'. Use linking words to explain reasons.

예시: Yes, many Chinese parents encourage their children to visit the library regularly to read books, which helps improve their knowledge and achieve better academic results.

× I usually read books in at home.

✓ I usually read books at home.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary before 'at home'. The correct preposition to indicate location here is 'at'. Therefore, 'in at home' is incorrect and should be simplified to 'at home'.

× This self learning room in the library, so I always study or make some vision in there because it's a quiet environment for me and my home is quite noisy.

✓ There is a self-learning room in the library, so I always study or do some revision there because it's a quiet environment for me and my home is quite noisy.

The original sentence lacks a main verb and has awkward phrasing. 'This self learning room in the library' is a fragment. Adding 'There is' corrects the sentence structure. Also, 'make some vision' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'do some revision'. 'In there' is better as 'there' for natural English.

× I like to read a series of detective books in the library and I felt like so happy, so comfortable.

✓ I liked to read a series of detective books in the library and I felt so happy and comfortable.

The sentence mixes present tense 'like' with past tense 'felt'. Since the context is about the past, both verbs should be in past tense: 'liked' and 'felt'. Also, 'felt like so happy' is incorrect; it should be 'felt so happy'. The conjunction 'and' is more appropriate than a comma here.

× the Chinese parents prefer their kids to read a lot of books in the library to improve their knowledge of studying so that they have good organisations or academic results later.

✓ Chinese parents prefer their kids to read many books in the library to improve their knowledge so that they have good organisation and academic results later.

'A lot of books' is acceptable but 'many books' is more formal and appropriate here. 'Knowledge of studying' is awkward; 'knowledge' alone suffices. 'Organisations' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'organisation' meaning organisation skills or habits. Also, 'and' is better than 'or' to connect 'organisation' and 'academic results'.