List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, reduce filler words (uh), and use one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because) to make it coherent.

예시: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me remember items and stick to my budget. For example, last week I saved time by checking my list and buying everything I needed in one trip.

제안: Open with a direct topic sentence, remove filler words, and avoid repeating the question. Provide one clear reason why it works and a brief specific example related to photography to support your point.

예시: Yes, I keep work lists to stay organized. Because I’m a photographer, I list tasks like editing photos and backing up files, which ensures I don’t miss deadlines and keeps my clients satisfied.

제안: Give a direct opinion then support it with a specific reason and example. Avoid vague phrases like "I've got nothing against them" and keep it to two or three sentences. Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

예시: Some people dislike lists because they trust their memory and find lists unnecessary. For example, a friend of mine prefers to remember tasks mentally and says writing lists feels like extra work.

제안: Start with a clear preference sentence, avoid repetition, and add one concrete advantage of using the phone (e.g., reminders, editing). Keep it within two to three sentences and eliminate filler words.

예시: I prefer using my phone because it’s always with me and I can easily edit lists or set reminders. For instance, I use a notes app to tick off items and set alerts for important tasks.

× I definitely do make a list, uh, when I shop so that it will be easier for me to know what to buy.

✓ I definitely make a list when I shop so that it is easier for me to know what to buy.

The original uses 'do make' which is unnecessary emphasis in this context and 'will be' which shifts to future unnecessarily. Use simple present 'make' for habitual actions and 'is' to express a general truth. Suggestion: prefer simple present for routines (I make) and simple present for general results (it is easier).

× And also it's very important to make a list in order for you to not forget what you're going to buy when going to shop.

✓ Also, it is very important to make a list so that you do not forget what you are going to buy when you go shopping.

Pronoun and phrasing issues: 'in order for you to not forget' is wordy; use 'so that you do not forget.' 'When going to shop' lacks subject and correct noun form; use 'when you go shopping.' Suggestions: use clear subject pronouns and standard 'go shopping' collocation.

× Always bring with you a list.

✓ Always bring a list with you.

Word order is awkward; the correct and more natural order in English is 'bring a list with you.' Suggestion: place the object 'a list' before the prepositional phrase 'with you'.

× Yes, I also make a list for my work, uh, in order to be more organized, uh, when it comes to my stuff such as papers, documents, files and even photos because I am a photographer and it does it work? Definitely it works because for someone like me who's very organized, it helps me.

✓ Yes, I also make a list for my work to be more organized when it comes to my things such as papers, documents, files and even photos because I am a photographer. Does it work? Definitely; it helps me because I am very organized.

Multiple issues: 'in order to be' is acceptable but can be shortened to 'to be.' 'Stuff' is informal; use 'things.' The phrase 'does it work?' was merged into the sentence incorrectly; separate it as a question. 'Definitely it works' is awkward — use 'Definitely; it helps me.' Also remove redundant 'for someone like me who's very organized.' Suggestions: split long run-on sentences into clearer clauses and use appropriate formality and word order.

× Maybe because they're too confident that they won't forget stuff such as the things that they're going to buy.

✓ Maybe because they are too confident that they will not forget things such as what they are going to buy.

Contractions are acceptable in speech, but written correction replaces 'they're' with 'they are' and 'won't' with 'will not' for clarity. 'Stuff such as the things that they're going to buy' is redundant; use 'things such as what they are going to buy.' Suggestion: avoid redundancy and use clearer noun phrases.

× I've got nothing against them 'cause that means they have strong memories and which is good to admire them and I'm happy for them.

✓ I have nothing against them because that means they have strong memories, which is admirable, and I am happy for them.

Problems with conjunctions and relative clauses: ''cause' is informal; use 'because.' The clause 'and which is good to admire them' is ungrammatical — use 'which is admirable.' Also 'admire them' doesn't need 'to.' Suggestions: use proper conjunctions and form relative clauses correctly: 'which is admirable.'

× I definitely prefer my phone 'cause wherever I go I always use my phone and it's much easier for me to type the things that I need to buy, for example, or the things that I need to do for the day and it helps me maximize the use of my phone phones features.

✓ I definitely prefer my phone because wherever I go I always use it, and it is much easier for me to type the things I need to buy or the things I need to do for the day, and it helps me maximize the use of my phone's features.

Pronoun and possessive errors: repeat 'my phone' is redundant; replace second mention with pronoun 'it.' Use 'because' instead of ''cause.' 'Phone phones features' is a typo; use the possessive 'phone's features.' Also simplify 'the things that I need' to 'the things I need.' Suggestions: avoid repetition, use correct possessive form, and prefer clearer, concise phrasing.