List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Та хариултаа илүү тодорхой, логик дараалалтай, алдаагүй хэлээр илэрхийлэх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I usually make a shopping list to avoid forgetting anything, especially because the shop is far from my house." гэж хэлж болно.

예시: I usually make a shopping list to avoid forgetting anything, especially because the shop is far from my house.

제안: Хариултаа илүү ойлгомжтой, бүтээлч байдлаар илэрхийлэх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I usually make a to-do list for work because it helps me increase my efficiency and organize tasks for the next day." гэж хэлж болно.

예시: I usually make a to-do list for work because it helps me increase my efficiency and organize tasks for the next day.

제안: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, алдаагүй, логик дараалалтай болгох хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "Some people may not like making lists because their jobs, like in restaurants or service industries, don't require it, so they are not used to this habit." гэж хэлж болно.

예시: Some people may not like making lists because their jobs, like in restaurants or service industries, don't require it, so they are not used to this habit.

제안: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, алдаагүй, утга агуулгатай болгох хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I prefer making lists on paper because it gives me a cozy feeling, even though technology offers convenient options." гэж хэлж болно.

예시: I prefer making lists on paper because it gives me a cozy feeling, even though technology offers convenient options.

× This shop is far from my house so I buy other things what I need when I go shopping and I make a list unless forget something.

✓ This shop is far from my house, so I buy other things that I need when I go shopping, and I make a list so I don't forget something.

The pronoun 'what' is incorrectly used; it should be 'that' to refer to things needed. Also, 'unless forget something' is incorrect; it should be 'so I don't forget something' to express purpose clearly.

× I usually make a list because it is my job efficiencies increased, so I usually layout tomorrow make things.

✓ I usually make a list because it increases my job efficiency, so I usually plan what to do tomorrow.

The original sentence has unclear structure and incorrect phrasing. 'It is my job efficiencies increased' is ungrammatical; it should be 'it increases my job efficiency'. 'Layout tomorrow make things' is unclear and should be 'plan what to do tomorrow' for clarity.

× Maybe some occupation is not don't need to make a list like restaurant other service companies and make a list so habit, but some of people don't need it.

✓ Maybe some occupations, like restaurants and other service companies, don't need to make a list because it's a habit, but some people don't need it.

The sentence misuses pronouns and articles. 'Some occupation is not don't need' is incorrect; it should be 'some occupations don't need'. Also, 'make a list so habit' is unclear and corrected to 'because it's a habit'.

× I prefer make a list on paper because yours give me cozy feelings.

✓ I prefer to make a list on paper because it gives me cozy feelings.

'Yours' is an incorrect pronoun here; it should be 'it' referring to the paper. Also, 'prefer make' should be 'prefer to make' for correct verb form.

× Pepper is is nice in nowadays technology is.

✓ Paper is nice nowadays with technology.

The sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Pepper is is nice in nowadays technology is' is corrected to 'Paper is nice nowadays with technology' to convey the intended meaning clearly.