Part 1
시험관
Do you make a list when you shop?
수험생
Never, because I think shopping is a thing that you can do whatever you want, just like wandering around the shopping mall and find something you want to buy. I think it depends on the fortune. If you're in good luck, maybe you will meet your favorite things and bought it, but if it's not in luck, then it may be. Depends on the fortune.
시험관
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
수험생
I do make a list for my work because actually I am a blog lover and I always go to some social media and find some bloggers to make their list about their schoolwork. And I think it is maybe it is very efficient for US students. So I always try to do some and I finally found that it was really work on my schoolwork.
시험관
Why don't some people like making lists?
수험생
Because I think they didn't want to get a sense of being controlled and they want to do things like I can do this thing wherever and wherever I want. So they might don't want to make some lists and limit their actions about what they are going to do next.
시험관
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
수험생
I prefer the further one because actually I am a high school student so I do not have more time to spend on my. I need to spend more of my time to go and get my courses better and then I could only have access to the paper and write the list on them.
Do you make a list when you shop?
점수: 60.0제안: 你的回答表达了观点,但语言不够自然,且有重复和语法错误。建议简化句子结构,避免重复表达“depends on the fortune”,并使用更准确的时态和词汇。
예시: I usually don't make a shopping list because I prefer to browse freely in the mall. Sometimes, I find interesting items by chance, which makes shopping more enjoyable.
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
점수: 55.0제안: 回答内容不够清晰,逻辑混乱,且有语法错误。建议直接回答问题,说明自己是否做工作清单,并具体说明效果,避免无关信息。
예시: Yes, I make lists for my work because it helps me stay organized. I find that making lists improves my efficiency and helps me complete tasks on time.
Why don't some people like making lists?
점수: 65.0제안: 回答表达了观点,但句子结构不够自然,有语法错误。建议使用更简洁的句子,避免重复,并用更准确的表达方式。
예시: Some people dislike making lists because they feel it restricts their freedom. They prefer to decide what to do spontaneously without being controlled by a plan.
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
점수: 50.0제안: 回答不够清晰,表达混乱,且有语法错误。建议明确表达偏好,并说明原因,避免无关信息。
예시: I prefer to make lists on paper because it's faster for me and I can easily carry the notes. Also, I find writing by hand helps me remember tasks better.
× If you're in good luck, maybe you will meet your favorite things and bought it, but if it's not in luck, then it may be.
✓ If you're in good luck, maybe you will meet your favorite things and buy them, but if you're not lucky, then it may not be.
这里的'bought'是过去式,句子中需要用动词原形'buy',因为前面有助动词'will',助动词后面动词应为原形。建议将'bought'改为'buy'。
× Depends on the fortune.
✓ It depends on the fortune.
句子缺少主语,'Depends on the fortune'是句子结构不完整,应加上主语'It',构成完整句子。
× I always go to some social media and find some bloggers to make their list about their schoolwork.
✓ I always go to some social media and find some bloggers who make their lists about their schoolwork.
原句中'find some bloggers to make their list'结构不清晰,应该用定语从句修饰'bloggers',且'list'应为复数形式'lists',表示多个博主的清单。
× I finally found that it was really work on my schoolwork.
✓ I finally found that it really worked on my schoolwork.
'work'应使用过去式'worked',因为前面有过去时态'found',句子描述过去的情况。
× So they might don't want to make some lists and limit their actions about what they are going to do next.
✓ So they might not want to make some lists and limit their actions about what they are going to do next.
'might don't'是不正确的表达,情态动词后应接动词原形,否定形式为'might not'。
× I prefer the further one because actually I am a high school student so I do not have more time to spend on my.
✓ I prefer the former one because actually I am a high school student so I do not have much time to spend on it.
'further'用错,应为'former'表示前者;'more time'用法不当,否定句中应使用'much time';'on my'缺少宾语,应改为'on it'。
× I need to spend more of my time to go and get my courses better and then I could only have access to the paper and write the list on them.
✓ I need to spend more time improving my courses, and then I can only have access to paper and write the list on it.
原句结构混乱,'spend more of my time to go and get my courses better'表达不清,应改为'spend more time improving my courses';'could'改为'can'更符合语境;'paper'是不可数名词,后面用单数代词'it'。