List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually make a list when I go grocery shopping. I check my kitchen to see which items are running low and write them down. However, I don't make lists when buying clothes because I prefer to choose items spontaneously. Making a list helps me stay organized and avoid forgetting important things.

제안: Your answer has some repetition and unclear phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to add specific details about how making lists helps you at work. Avoid unnecessary repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity.

예시: Yes, I do make lists for my work, especially since I am a supervisor at Tim Hortons. Making a list helps me keep track of my schedule and monitor inventory levels. For example, I check which supplies are running low so I can reorder them on time. This system helps me manage my responsibilities efficiently.

제안: Your answer needs clearer structure and more precise vocabulary. Begin with a direct response, then explain reasons using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and improve grammar for better clarity.

예시: In my opinion, some people dislike making lists because they believe they can remember tasks without writing them down. However, I recommend making lists since they help organize tasks and ensure nothing is forgotten. For instance, a list can remind you of important deadlines and appointments.

제안: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear preference with reasons, use linking words to connect ideas, and avoid redundancy. Keep your answer concise and relevant.

예시: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is always with me when I go out. This way, I can easily check my list anytime without worrying about forgetting a paper list at home. Using a phone app also allows me to update my list quickly and stay organized.

× Yes, of course when I was going to the any grocery shopping, then I can make a list from my kitchen which of my things are furnished or it's almost at the end.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was going grocery shopping, I could make a list from my kitchen of which things I had or which were almost finished.

The phrase 'going to the any grocery shopping' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'going grocery shopping' without 'to the any'. Also, 'make a list from my kitchen which of my things are furnished or it's almost at the end' is awkward; it should be 'make a list from my kitchen of which things I had or which were almost finished' to correctly use prepositions and clarify meaning.

× Well when I was going to buy a clothes I had made no list for that.

✓ Well, when I was going to buy clothes, I had made no list for that.

The word 'clothes' is plural and does not require an article 'a'. Using 'a clothes' is incorrect because 'clothes' is a plural noun and cannot be singularized with 'a'.

× Then with the things ex attached to me, I can borrow the.

✓ Then with the things attached to me, I can borrow them.

The phrase 'things ex attached to me' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or error. Also, 'I can borrow the' is incomplete; the pronoun 'them' should be used to refer to 'things'. This corrects the pronoun usage and completes the sentence.

× Uncertainly, I don't. I make a list for my work because I was working the Tim horton's and I can make, I can make a list for my schedule or I'm the supervisor here.

✓ Certainly, I don't make a list for my work because I was working at Tim Hortons, but I can make a list for my schedule since I'm the supervisor here.

The word 'Uncertainly' is incorrect; 'Certainly' or 'Actually' fits better. Also, 'I was working the Tim horton's' lacks the preposition 'at'. The modal verb 'can' is used correctly but the sentence structure is awkward and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× I was working the Tim horton's and I can make, I can make a list for my schedule or I'm the supervisor here.

✓ I was working at Tim Hortons and I can make a list for my schedule because I'm the supervisor here.

The preposition 'at' is required after 'working' when referring to a place of work. Also, 'Tim horton's' should be 'Tim Hortons' without the possessive apostrophe.

× So it's important for me to check each and everything which thing is running too low or which is almost finished.

✓ So it's important for me to check everything to see which items are running low or are almost finished.

The phrase 'each and everything which thing' is redundant and awkward. 'Everything' or 'all items' is sufficient. Also, 'which thing' should be replaced with 'which items' for clarity and correct pronoun use.

× According to my opinions, most of the people do not like to make a list because they think that we can remember the things at the same slot.

✓ In my opinion, most people do not like to make a list because they think they can remember things at the same time.

'According to my opinions' is incorrect; 'In my opinion' is the correct phrase. 'Most of the people' should be 'most people'. 'We can remember the things at the same slot' is awkward; 'they can remember things at the same time' is clearer and uses correct pronouns.

× But I I recommended everyone to make a list because it's easy for you that the which of the things you need to do at the exact time.

✓ But I recommend everyone make a list because it's easy for you to know which things you need to do at the exact time.

The phrase 'I I recommended' is incorrect; it should be 'I recommend' for present tense consistency. 'Recommended everyone to make' is incorrect; 'recommend everyone make' is correct. 'It's easy for you that the which of the things' is awkward; it should be 'it's easy for you to know which things'.

× In the today's modern world, a 99% of the people can prefer to make a list on their mobile phone because when they can go outside their mobile phone is always with with them.

✓ In today's modern world, 99% of people prefer to make a list on their mobile phones because when they go outside, their mobile phone is always with them.

The phrase 'a 99% of the people' is incorrect; '99% of people' is correct. 'Can prefer' is incorrect; 'prefer' is the correct verb. 'With with them' is a repetition error. Also, 'mobile phone' should be plural when referring generally.

× But if they can forget their paper at their home, then it's also difficult for them because they can make a list they can services.

✓ But if they forget their paper at home, then it's also difficult for them because they cannot make a list or use services.

'If they can forget' is incorrect; 'if they forget' is correct. 'At their home' is better as 'at home'. The phrase 'because they can make a list they can services' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'because they cannot make a list or use services' to convey the intended meaning. Also, conjunctions and sentence structure are corrected for clarity.