List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Избегайте повторов и грамматических ошибок, используйте связующие слова для логичности. Например, начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте детали с использованием связок.

예시: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me stay organized. For instance, when I go to the local supermarket near my home, I write down everything I need to buy to avoid forgetting anything.

제안: Ответ должен быть более ясным и связным. Избегайте лишних пауз и неуверенности, используйте связующие слова для плавности речи и конкретизируйте детали.

예시: Yes, as a team lead of five girls in our startup, I make task lists to assign responsibilities. For example, I create lists for our developers to track app development tasks efficiently.

제안: Ответ должен быть более грамматически правильным и содержательным. Избегайте обобщений без объяснений, используйте связки и конкретные причины.

예시: I think some people dislike making lists because they prefer a more flexible approach and find strict organization unnecessary. Additionally, some might feel it's time-consuming or simply don't enjoy planning.

제안: Ответ должен быть более чётким и без лишних пауз. Используйте связующие слова и объясните преимущества выбранного способа.

예시: I prefer making lists on my phone because I always have it with me. For example, I use the Notion app, which helps me organize my tasks efficiently and access them anytime.

× when I went went to the Gal Mart that is that is called our supermarket near with our home

✓ when I went to the Gal Mart that is called our supermarket near our home

The sentence contains repeated words 'went went' and 'that is that is', which are typographical errors. Also, the preposition 'near with' is incorrect; 'near' should be used without 'with'. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× near with our home

✓ near our home

The preposition 'near' should not be followed by 'with'. The correct form is 'near our home'. Using 'near with' is grammatically incorrect.

× I really like to do some kind of notes what I should to buy for example, it can be.

✓ I really like to make some notes about what I should buy, for example, it can be.

The phrase 'do some kind of notes' is incorrect; the verb 'make' is used with 'notes'. Also, 'what I should to buy' is incorrect; 'should' is followed by the base verb without 'to'. Correcting these improves grammatical accuracy.

× I'm team lead, I lead A5 girls and we have some kind of tasks, uh, for, uh, for our startup and how like I see you all.

✓ I'm a team lead; I lead 5 girls and we have some tasks for our startup, and as I see it all.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'team lead'. The phrase 'some kind of tasks' should be 'some tasks' for naturalness. 'How like I see you all' is unclear and corrected to 'as I see it all' for clarity.

× I really like to give some kind of task response, for example, our developers about our app tasks and.

✓ I really like to assign some tasks, for example, to our developers about our app tasks.

The phrase 'give some kind of task response' is unclear and incorrect. 'Assign some tasks' is more appropriate. Also, 'for example, our developers about our app tasks' needs a preposition 'to' to indicate the recipient of the tasks.

× maybe they're very is like structure people and for them that is not crucial.

✓ maybe they're very structured people and for them that is not crucial.

The phrase 'very is like structure people' is incorrect. The correct adjective is 'structured' to describe people who like structure. Removing unnecessary words improves clarity.

× I really like to create a list on my phone because, umm, I was my, I was with my phone 24 on 7 because I really like to do it in my notion and that is very helpful and useful.

✓ I really like to create a list on my phone because I am with my phone 24/7 and I like to do it in my Notion app, which is very helpful and useful.

The phrase 'I was my, I was with my phone 24 on 7' is incorrect; it should be 'I am with my phone 24/7'. Also, 'do it in my notion' should specify 'Notion app' for clarity. Correcting these improves grammatical correctness and clarity.