List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is quite long and a bit repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating phrases like 'if I do not'. Also, use clearer linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add a reason or example to support it.

예시: Yes, I always make a list when I shop because I tend to forget items if I go without one. For instance, last week I missed buying milk because I didn't have a list. Therefore, making a list helps me stay focused and remember everything I need.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and includes filler words like 'so' and 'really' multiple times. Try to make your sentences more direct and avoid unnecessary repetition. Also, clarify the last sentence as 'You cannot just go and announce' is unclear. Use linking words like 'because' or 'therefore' to connect ideas.

예시: I teach at a college, so I need to be systematic. I make a list of tasks for the day, such as what to teach and other responsibilities. This helps me stay organized and ensures I don't forget anything important. Therefore, making a list definitely works for me.

제안: Your answer is clear but can be improved by avoiding repetition like 'some some people' and by using linking words to connect your points better. Also, try to provide more specific reasons or examples to enrich your answer.

예시: Some people dislike making lists because it takes time and requires careful thought. Additionally, many prefer to be spontaneous and enjoy doing things on the spot without planning. For example, a friend of mine likes to decide activities spontaneously rather than following a list.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and has some unclear phrasing. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating 'I prefer' multiple times. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' effectively to connect your ideas clearly.

예시: I prefer making lists on my phone because it saves time and is eco-friendly. Using paper requires pens and wastes resources, which I want to avoid. Also, my phone is always with me, so it's convenient to access my lists anytime.

× Definitely making a list is my priority because I am a forgetful shopper if I just go there unannounced and if I do not, if I do not have a list with me, I will tend to forget what to buy, where to buy, because I am a focused person, I shall say.

✓ Definitely, making a list is my priority because I am a forgetful shopper if I just go there unannounced and if I do not have a list with me, I will tend to forget what to buy, where to buy, because I am a focused person, I shall say.

The sentence starts abruptly with 'Definitely making a list' which can be confusing. Adding a comma after 'Definitely' clarifies that 'making a list' is the subject. This improves readability and grammatical correctness by properly separating the adverb from the gerund phrase.

× So yeah, making a list of things that I should be doing in the college for that particular day will be really helpful.

✓ So yeah, making a list of things that I should do in the college for that particular day will be really helpful.

The phrase 'should be doing' is a continuous form which is unnecessary here. Using the simple form 'should do' is more appropriate to express planned or intended actions, making the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× You cannot just go and announce.

✓ You cannot just go and shop without a list.

The original sentence 'You cannot just go and announce' is incomplete and unclear. The verb 'announce' is incorrectly used here. The intended meaning is likely that one cannot just go shopping without preparation. Replacing 'announce' with 'shop without a list' corrects the preposition and verb usage to fit the context.

× Some people do not like making a list because it is time consuming I must say, and also because they have to really sit and think.

✓ Some people do not like making a list because it is time-consuming, I must say, and also because they have to really sit and think.

The phrase 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as an adjective before a noun or in this context. This is a standard rule in English to correctly form compound adjectives.

× I prefer making a list on my phone because that saves the time and it is also eco friendly because for paper if I write on the paper it will be I will need paper and a pen so that is like not so eco friendly.

✓ I prefer making a list on my phone because that saves time and it is also eco-friendly. If I write on paper, I will need paper and a pen, so that is not so eco-friendly.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect preposition use such as 'for paper if I write on the paper it will be I will need paper'. Simplifying and correcting prepositions to 'If I write on paper' and breaking the sentence into clearer parts improves clarity and grammatical correctness.