List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more structured and avoid filler words like 'umm'. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons or examples. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise.

예시: I usually don't make a shopping list because I prefer to remember the items I need. For example, I keep a mental note of essentials like milk and bread, which helps me shop quickly.

제안: Improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about how the list helps you.

예시: Yes, I make a list of my tasks on my bedroom mirror. After completing each task, I tick it off, which helps me stay organized and motivated.

제안: Avoid excessive hesitation and filler words. Provide a clearer and more concise explanation with linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Some people avoid making lists because it can increase their anxiety. For instance, seeing many tasks written down might make them feel overwhelmed and stressed.

제안: Clarify your ideas and avoid confusing statements. Use correct grammar and provide reasons for your preference with linking words.

예시: I prefer making lists on paper because I am more comfortable with it. Since I grew up using paper, I find it easier and more satisfying than using a smartphone.

× In my opinion, I'm a lazy person and umm in most of the time I don't have a list for shopping and I just use my brain to remember things I wanted to buy.

✓ In my opinion, I'm a lazy person and umm most of the time I don't have a list for shopping and I just use my brain to remember things I want to buy.

The phrase 'in most of the time' is incorrect; it should be 'most of the time' without 'in'. Also, 'things I wanted to buy' should be in present tense 'things I want to buy' to match the context of current habits.

× Actually yes. I make a list for my works in my mirror.

✓ Actually yes. I make a list for my work on my mirror.

The word 'works' is incorrect here; 'work' is an uncountable noun referring to tasks or jobs. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'on' when referring to writing on a mirror.

× I have a big mirror in my room and I usually write my works and after that I did them, I make a point to them.

✓ I have a big mirror in my room and I usually write my work and after that I do them, I make a point to them.

The phrase 'after that I did them' is incorrect because the action is habitual; it should be present tense 'I do them'. Also, 'works' should be 'work' as explained before.

× I make a list for my works in my mirror.

✓ I make a list for my work on my mirror.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to writing on a surface like a mirror; the correct preposition is 'on'.

× I make a point to them.

✓ I make a point next to them.

The phrase 'make a point to them' is unclear and incorrect; the intended meaning is likely marking or ticking items, so 'make a point next to them' or 'tick them off' is better.

× I make a list for my works in my mirror.

✓ I make a list of my work on my mirror.

The phrase 'make a list for my works' is incorrect; it should be 'make a list of my work'. Also, 'in my mirror' should be 'on my mirror'.

× I burned in 1995 and I'm good with papers and not with smartphones and I really like writing in papers.

✓ I was born in 1995 and I'm good with papers and not with smartphones and I really like writing on paper.

The phrase 'I burned in 1995' is a wrong past tense verb; the correct verb is 'was born'. Also, 'writing in papers' should be 'writing on paper'.