List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be more concise and natural. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and redundant phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you make a list, and how you do it, keeping it within 4-5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I always make a list when I shop because I tend to forget items easily. Therefore, I prepare an Excel sheet listing everything I need for the week or a special event. This habit helps me stay organized and ensures I don't miss anything important.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains many filler words and some unclear phrases. Try to use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas logically. Also, be more specific about how the list helps you. Keep your answer clear and concise within 5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I make lists for my work because they help me remember tasks I need to complete. For example, when I go shopping, I list items to buy and tick them off one by one. This method helps me stay focused and finish my work efficiently.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and contains many hesitations and incomplete thoughts. Try to give a clear opinion with reasons, using linking words like 'because' or 'maybe'. Avoid vague or contradictory statements. Keep your answer structured and complete within 4-5 sentences.

예시: Some people don't like making lists because they find it time-consuming and prefer to remember things mentally. Also, they might feel that lists limit their flexibility. Therefore, they choose not to use lists even if it sometimes leads to forgetting tasks.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains many filler words. Try to express your preference clearly and explain why, using linking words like 'but' or 'however'. Avoid incomplete sentences and keep your answer concise and natural.

예시: I prefer making lists on paper because I enjoy the tactile feeling of writing in my notebook. However, when I'm in a hurry, I use my phone to quickly jot down notes. Overall, I find paper lists more satisfying and effective for me.

× I do make a list when I shop as it's a very important part of my shopping, uh, thing as I tend to forget things more often.

✓ I do make a list when I shop as it's a very important part of my shopping, uh, thing since I tend to forget things more often.

The word 'as' is used incorrectly here to indicate reason; 'since' is more appropriate to express cause in this context.

× So I try to make the excel sheet where I list everything what I want to buy for the event or the, uh, week.

✓ So I try to make an Excel sheet where I list everything that I want to buy for the event or the, uh, week.

The relative pronoun 'what' is incorrect here; 'that' should be used to introduce the relative clause referring to 'everything'. Also, 'the excel sheet' should be 'an Excel sheet' as it is not a specific known sheet.

× So it's a very good habit for me as I'm, I forget things very easily.

✓ So it's a very good habit for me as I forget things very easily.

The phrase 'I'm, I forget' is incorrect and redundant; it should be simplified to 'I forget' to maintain grammatical correctness.

× I do make a list for my work, Uh, it definitely works for me. Totally up for it as it helps me to, uh, remember things, what I want to do the next.

✓ I do make a list for my work. Uh, it definitely works for me. Totally up for it as it helps me to, uh, remember the things that I want to do next.

The phrase 'remember things, what I want to do the next' is incorrect; 'things that I want to do next' is the correct relative clause. Also, 'the next' is incomplete and should be 'next' without 'the'.

× So for that also I, uh, create a list so I can finish that 1 by 1, so it helps.

✓ So for that also I, uh, create a list so I can finish them one by one, so it helps.

The pronoun 'that' is singular but refers to multiple items; it should be 'them' to agree in number. Also, '1 by 1' should be expressed as 'one by one' for clarity and correctness.

× I don't know much about this, uh, people, but I assume that PE some people like this, they, they are not much organized.

✓ I don't know much about these, uh, people, but I assume that some people like this are not very organized.

'This people' is incorrect; 'these people' is the correct plural demonstrative pronoun. Also, 'not much organized' should be 'not very organized' to correctly modify the adjective.

× They don't, uh, they don't want to, uh, waste their time in making the list.

✓ They don't, uh, want to, uh, waste their time making the list.

The phrase 'waste their time in making' is incorrect; the preposition 'in' is unnecessary here. The correct form is 'waste their time making'.

× Uh, or they are very, maybe they might be controversial.

✓ Uh, or maybe they might be confident.

The word 'controversial' is incorrectly used here; it does not fit the context. Possibly the intended word is 'confident' or 'self-reliant' to explain why they don't make lists.

× They might be very intelligent and they can record everything in their mind, So they might not be making the.

✓ They might be very intelligent and can remember everything in their mind, so they might not make lists.

The phrase 'record everything in their mind' is awkward; 'remember everything' is more natural. Also, 'might not be making the' is incomplete and should be 'might not make lists'.

× Uh, as a person, I am a very old school kid.

✓ Uh, as a person, I am a very old-school kid.

'Old school' used as an adjective should be hyphenated as 'old-school'.

× I love to make list on my note, uh, notebook, which, uh, makes me connected to the, uh, earth.

✓ I love to make lists in my notebook, which, uh, makes me feel connected to the, uh, earth.

'Make list' should be 'make lists' to agree in number. Also, 'on my note, uh, notebook' is awkward; 'in my notebook' is correct preposition usage. 'Makes me connected' should be 'makes me feel connected'.

× And also when I'm in hurry, I would prefer taking notes in my phone.

✓ And also when I'm in a hurry, I would prefer taking notes on my phone.

The phrase 'in hurry' is missing the article 'a' and should be 'in a hurry'. Also, the correct preposition with 'phone' is 'on my phone'.

× But moreover, I am a very old school kid and which will which.

✓ But moreover, I am a very old-school kid.

The phrase 'and which will which' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be removed for clarity and correctness.