List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并使用更准确的词汇。可以增加连接词使表达更连贯。

예시: I usually don't make a shopping list because I tend to be impulsive. When I enter a store, I just buy what I want without planning, as making a list feels too complicated for me.

제안: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的时态和句型，明确表达观点，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: I used to make lists during my primary school days, and they were very helpful. However, now that I am older, I find making lists too complicated and unnecessary for my work.

제안: 回答重复且表达不够清晰，建议简化句子，避免重复，使用更准确的词汇，并用连接词连接观点。

예시: Some people dislike making lists for several reasons. Firstly, impulsive personalities may find lists restrictive. Secondly, some believe that making lists is unnecessary.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用正确的词汇和句型，避免重复，并清楚表达偏好和原因。

예시: I definitely prefer making lists on my phone because technology makes it easy and convenient. Also, it helps save paper, which is environmentally friendly.

× We usually don't make the list when I shop 'cause I'm kind of a person who is very impulsive.

✓ We usually don't make lists when I shop 'cause I'm kind of a person who is very impulsive.

这里的“list”应该用复数形式“lists”，因为购物时通常会制作多个清单，使用复数更符合习惯表达。

× So when I enter the shop I just buy the thing that I want and I don't really like to make the list because it's too complex.

✓ So when I enter the shop I just buy the things that I want and I don't really like to make a list because it's too complex.

“thing”应使用复数形式“things”，因为通常会买多样物品；“the list”改为“a list”，因为这里指的是一般的清单，不是特指某个清单。

× I would like to say not usually in my primary school life I always do that and I think it's very helpful for me.

✓ I would like to say not usually. In my primary school life, I always did that and I think it was very helpful for me.

句子结构混乱，且时态不一致。这里“do that”应改为过去时“did that”，因为描述的是过去的习惯。

× But right now after my grow up, I think do the list is too complex and I don't think it's necessary.

✓ But right now, after I have grown up, I think making a list is too complex and I don't think it's necessary.

“after my grow up”应改为“after I have grown up”，使用完成时态表达成长完成；“do the list”应改为“making a list”，动名词形式更合适。

× I think the people who don't like to make the list for several reasons.

✓ I think the people who don't like to make lists have several reasons.

“make the list”应改为“make lists”，因为这里指的是一般的清单，且“for several reasons”应改为“have several reasons”，更符合表达习惯。

× First about the personality, I think the people who are very impulsive, they don't like to do in the list.

✓ First, about personality, I think people who are very impulsive don't like to make lists.

“do in the list”用法错误，应改为“make lists”；“about the personality”中“the”不必要，且句子结构需调整。

× And another thing, another reason I think is related to the to the people 'cause they think it's not necessary.

✓ And another reason, I think, is related to the people because they think it's not necessary.

“related to the to the people”重复且多余，应简化为“related to the people”；“'cause”口语化，正式表达用“because”。

× I will definitely say I prefer to release on the phone 'cause right now I have a very technology code generation to make the list on the phone is very easy and it doesn't doesn't waste the paper.

✓ I will definitely say I prefer to rely on the phone because right now I have very advanced technology; making lists on the phone is very easy and it doesn't waste paper.

“prefer to release on the phone”表达错误，应为“prefer to rely on the phone”；“technology code generation”不合适，改为“very advanced technology”；“doesn't doesn't”重复，应去掉一个；“waste the paper”中“the”不必要。