List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова для плавности и избегайте разрывов в предложениях. Также старайтесь использовать полные предложения и избегать повторений.

예시: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me organize my thoughts and focus on buying only what I need, which saves me time.

제안: Ответ не ясен и содержит много пауз и повторов. Следует строить предложения более логично и ясно, объясняя причину, почему не делаете список для работы.

예시: No, I don't usually make a list for work because my tasks vary a lot, so it's hard to plan them in advance.

제안: Ответ очень непонятен и неструктурирован. Нужно использовать полные предложения, объяснять причины и использовать связующие слова для логичности.

예시: Some people don't like making lists because they think it wastes time and prefer to handle tasks spontaneously.

제안: Ответ содержит противоречия и неполные предложения. Следует использовать полные и логичные предложения, объясняя преимущества использования телефона.

예시: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is always with me, so I can check my list anytime and anywhere.

× Actually I make it at least when I'm going to shop because it helped me fix my. Ideas and. I concentrate. Buy what I need and save my time.

✓ Actually, I make it at least when I'm going to shop because it helps me fix my ideas and concentrate on buying what I need and save my time.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'helped' (past tense) when the context requires present tense 'helps' to match the ongoing habit. Also, sentence fragments like 'fix my. Ideas and. I concentrate.' need to be combined properly for clarity.

× Actually I make it at least when I'm going to shop because it helped me fix my. Ideas and. I concentrate. Buy what I need and save my time.

✓ Actually, I make it at least when I'm going shopping because it helps me fix my ideas and concentrate on buying what I need and save my time.

The phrase 'going to shop' is incorrect; the correct form is 'going shopping' to express the activity. Preposition use with 'concentrate' requires 'on' before the gerund.

× Actually I make it at least when I'm going to shop because it helped me fix my. Ideas and. I concentrate. Buy what I need and save my time.

✓ Actually, I make a list at least when I'm going shopping because it helps me organize my ideas and concentrate on buying what I need and save my time.

The pronoun 'it' is unclear; specifying 'a list' clarifies the subject. Also, 'fix my ideas' is awkward; 'organize my ideas' is more appropriate.

× No, I don't make a list for a walk 'cause. Because it's a work. Maybe. Different kind of works, so I don't make it.

✓ No, I don't make a list for work because it's different kinds of work, so I don't make one.

The phrase 'for a walk' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'for work'. Also, 'different kind of works' should be 'different kinds of work' as 'work' is uncountable here.

× No, I don't make a list for a walk 'cause. Because it's a work. Maybe. Different kind of works, so I don't make it.

✓ No, I don't make a list for work because it's different kinds of work, so I don't make one.

The phrase 'different kind of works' is incorrect; 'work' is uncountable, so 'different kinds of work' is correct.

× Making a list. At first it. I need project called uncle to minimized. Addressed it. Waste a time, I'm making a list.

✓ Making a list, at first, I needed a project called 'Uncle' to minimize and address it. It wastes time, so I'm making a list.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. They need to be combined and clarified to convey the intended meaning properly.

× Making a list. At first it. I need project called uncle to minimized. Addressed it. Waste a time, I'm making a list.

✓ Making a list, at first, I needed a project called 'Uncle' to minimize and address it. It wastes time, so I'm making a list.

The phrase 'waste a time' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'wastes time' without an article.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone because my phone is always with me and I can. I can't check everywhere. My list.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because my phone is always with me and I can check my list anywhere.

The phrase 'I can't check everywhere my list' is incorrect. It should be 'I can check my list anywhere' to express the intended meaning clearly.