List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping because it helps me remember everything I need and saves time.

제안: Focus on clarity and grammar. Use correct verb forms and explain why making a list helps your work. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I make a list for my work because my tasks are usually repetitive, so a list helps me stay organized and complete them efficiently.

제안: Provide a clearer opinion with reasons. Use linking words like 'because' or 'as' to explain why some people dislike making lists. Avoid vague phrases.

예시: In my opinion, it depends on the person because some find making lists boring or time-consuming, while others find them helpful.

제안: Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Clearly state your preference and explain why, using linking words like 'because' or 'as'.

예시: I prefer to make lists on my mobile phone because they are less likely to get lost compared to paper lists.

× Yes, I make a list when I went to shops becaused this is very helpful for me, but helpful for me when I don't remember the things and I'll add I write a list.

✓ Yes, I make a list when I go to shops because this is very helpful for me, especially when I don't remember the things and I write a list.

The sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'went' instead of the present tense 'go' to match the habitual action. Also, 'becaused' is a misspelling of 'because'. The phrase 'I'll add I write a list' is unclear and corrected to 'I write a list' for clarity.

× Obviously, yes, I make a list when I when I do work, becaused my work is very typically and so I make a list.

✓ Obviously, yes, I make a list when I do work because my work is very typical, so I make a list.

The word 'becaused' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. 'Typically' is an adverb but the sentence needs the adjective 'typical' to describe 'work'. The repeated phrase 'when I when I' is corrected to a single 'when I'.

× In my opinion is spent on person to person. Some people don't like make a list, but some like a make a list.

✓ In my opinion, it depends from person to person. Some people don't like to make a list, but some like to make a list.

The phrase 'is spent on person to person' is incorrect and replaced with 'it depends from person to person' to convey the intended meaning. 'Don't like make' and 'like a make' are incorrect verb forms; corrected to 'don't like to make' and 'like to make' respectively.

× I prefer to make relation mobile phone 'cause this 'cause that is not lossed and rather than paper or lossed sometimes.

✓ I prefer to make lists on my mobile phone because it is not lost like paper sometimes is.

The phrase 'make relation mobile phone' is incorrect; corrected to 'make lists on my mobile phone'. 'Lossed' is not a word; replaced with 'lost'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and correctness.