Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence directly answering the question, then briefly explain why. Avoid unclear phrases and redundancy. Use 2–3 supporting details and linking words like 'because' or 'because of'.

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and express myself. For example, I often sing while cooking or commuting, and it lifts my mood and reduces stress.

제안: Respond directly and concisely: state whether you have taken lessons, then give specific reasons or circumstances using linking words (e.g. 'because', 'so'). Avoid repeating the same idea.

예시: No, I haven't taken formal singing lessons because there are few local classes and they are expensive. Instead, I practice at home using online tutorials.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence naming who you sing for, then add a short reason or feeling with a linking word. Be specific about the person or audience to make your answer concrete.

예시: I usually sing for my family, especially my younger sister, because their encouragement makes me more confident and singing together is fun.

제안: Give a direct opinion then support it with clear, specific reasons and an example. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' to make the response coherent and avoid vague phrases like 'I don't know.'

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it releases emotions and reduces stress. For example, when I sing with friends at a party, everyone smiles and feels more relaxed.

제안: Answer clearly (yes/no) and then explain briefly with a specific reason and an example. Avoid confusing or irrelevant comments and focus on a simple structure: topic sentence + supporting detail.

예시: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing because it inspires me and helps me learn new techniques. For instance, I often watch performances online to study different singers' styles.

제안: Give a direct answer then explain the reason with specific details and correct vocabulary. Replace unclear words ('glass') with the correct term ('class') and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: No, I haven't taken a singing class because most formal classes here are private and costly. Instead, I use free online lessons and practice with friends.

× Yes I do like singing, but singing I bad song doesn't love me.

✓ Yes, I do like singing, but if I sing a bad song, people don't enjoy it.

Original sentence has word order and adjective/adverb misuse ('singing I bad song' is ungrammatical). Also 'doesn't love me' is inappropriate for listeners; 'people don't enjoy it' fits context. Reorder to Subject-Verb-Object and use correct verb and object. Use commas and 'if' to express condition.

× No, I haven't. I have no one to sing with. I have no tutor. I mean no teacher for singing. They have no singing lessons.

✓ No, I haven't. I have no one to sing with. I have no tutor. I mean I have no singing teacher. There are no singing lessons.

Mix of tense and subject-reference errors: 'They have no singing lessons' is unclear; use 'There are no singing lessons' (there be issue and plural). 'No teacher for singing' is awkward; 'no singing teacher' is concise. Keep present tense to describe current situation.

× I have one to sing for. I just love singing. It makes me feel like I'm flying, Uh.

✓ I have someone to sing for. I just love singing. It makes me feel like I'm flying.

'One' is acceptable but ambiguous; 'someone' is clearer. Remove filler 'Uh'. Pronoun use improved by using 'someone' to refer to a person rather than 'one' which is formal/odd here.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because when you say you feel like you're free and when someone hears your voice, it feels like, oh, it's such a beautiful voice. Like I'm, I don't know.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because when you sing you feel free, and when someone hears your voice they think it is beautiful.

Sentence had awkward shifts and colloquial fillers. Replace 'when you say you feel like you're free' with 'when you sing you feel free' to match meaning and maintain present tense. Remove fillers ('oh', 'like I'm, I don't know') and make clauses parallel. Use 'they think it is beautiful' to report listener reaction.

× Has all people continued to understand they are seeing? Because watching them previously, I've been learning from them and I like to hear their beautiful voices and that, that, she said. And it's, it's unbelievable.

✓ Do people generally understand what they are seeing? By watching them before, I have learned from them, and I like to hear their beautiful voices. It is unbelievable.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Start with a proper question form 'Do people...?' instead of 'Has all people continued...'. 'Previously' better as 'before' or 'by watching them before'. Remove redundant fillers ('that, that, she said', repeated 'it's'). Use present perfect 'I have learned' to indicate past experience with present relevance.

× But I haven't guys, because here's the Philippines, there's no singing glass unless you paid for it. Not just like a normal glass, like it's a subject where it's a good color activities. But here you need to pay for it and you need to give some.

✓ But I haven't, guys, because here in the Philippines there are no singing classes unless you pay for them. It is not like a regular class; it is an extracurricular activity. Here you need to pay for it.

Many issues: 'glass' should be 'class' (spelling). Use plural 'classes' and 'them' as pronoun. Tense: 'unless you paid' should be 'unless you pay' for general truth. 'Good color activities' is unintelligible; likely 'extracurricular activity' or 'optional activity'. Simplify and correct quantifiers/pronouns. Remove vague 'you need to give some'.