Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains some grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating words like 'singing' unnecessarily and use clearer sentence structures. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it makes me feel happy and energized. At one point, I even wanted to pursue a career as a professional singer. Singing helps me relax and express my emotions, so it is very important to me.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

예시: Yes, when I was 18, I practiced singing every day. I used YouTube videos to learn how to sing songs properly, which really helped me improve my vocal skills.

제안: Your answer is honest but contains some grammatical errors and repetitions. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid repeating words. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

예시: I don't have a specific person I want to sing for because I feel shy about my voice. Therefore, I usually sing alone in the bathroom while taking a shower.

제안: Your answer has good content but is affected by hesitations and unclear phrases. Try to speak confidently and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, use more precise vocabulary and avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. I read an article that said singing reduces stress and improves mood. Additionally, it helps people recall happy memories.

× I really enjoy singing and and singing because it makes me feel happy and energized.

✓ I really enjoy singing because it makes me feel happy and energized.

The sentence contains a repeated phrase 'and and singing' which is redundant and incorrect. Removing the duplicate 'and singing' corrects the sentence. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily to maintain clarity.

× a mixed singing as my career.

✓ mixed singing as my career.

The phrase 'a mixed singing' is unclear and likely incorrect. Possibly, the student meant 'mixed singing' without the article 'a'. Articles should be used correctly with countable nouns; here, 'singing' is uncountable, so 'a' is inappropriate.

× Yes, when I was 18 I have to sing all day and that time I used to search on YouTube how to sing a song and that really that all the videos I have such really helped me to sing more clearly and it really helped me to enhance my singing skill and vocal.

✓ Yes, when I was 18 I had to sing all day and at that time I used to search on YouTube how to sing a song and all the videos really helped me to sing more clearly and it really helped me to enhance my singing skills and vocals.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have to' with past context 'when I was 18'. 'Have to' should be changed to past tense 'had to'. Also, 'that time' should be 'at that time'. The phrase 'that really that all the videos I have such really helped me' is ungrammatical and corrected to 'all the videos really helped me'. 'Singing skill and vocal' should be pluralized to 'singing skills and vocals' for correctness.

× Well there is no specific one that I will sing for 'cause I don't find my find my voice so attractive and I feel a bit shy when singing.

✓ Well, there is no specific person that I will sing for because I don't find my voice so attractive and I feel a bit shy when singing.

The phrase 'no specific one' is vague; 'no specific person' is clearer. The phrase 'find my find my voice' repeats 'find my' unnecessarily. Also, 'cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate in this context.

× I would feel shy to singing for someone so I do it often in bathroom while taking my shower so.

✓ I would feel shy singing for someone, so I often do it in the bathroom while taking my shower.

The phrase 'shy to singing' is incorrect; it should be 'shy singing' or 'shy to sing'. Also, 'in bathroom' needs the definite article 'the' to be 'in the bathroom'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I, I read an article where it says singing in uh, decreases some someone's stress and makes them happy and makes them feel more good and umm, it brings so many memories together.

✓ I read an article that says singing decreases someone's stress, makes them happy, and makes them feel better, and it brings many memories together.

The phrase 'singing in uh,' is unclear and likely a filler; it is removed. 'Some someone's' is incorrect; 'someone's' alone is correct. 'Feel more good' is ungrammatical; 'feel better' is the correct comparative form. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.