Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần được diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I like sing' nên là 'I like singing'. Bạn nên chia câu thành các câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng, và sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý sử dụng đúng thì và từ vựng phù hợp như 'concentration' thay vì 'concentrations' và 'patience' thay vì 'patient'.

예시: I like singing very much because it helps me reduce stress after a hard working day. When I was a child, I attended a music course which improved my concentration and patience.

제안: Bạn cần trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I attend' nên là 'I attended'. Sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời logic hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng từ đúng như 'concentration' thay vì 'concentrations' và 'music' thay vì 'musics'.

예시: When I was about 5 years old, I attended a music course to learn how to sing. These classes helped me improve soft skills such as concentration and creativity. Although I am not a professional singer now, I still enjoy music.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều từ không phù hợp hoặc không đúng ngữ cảnh. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không chính xác. Hãy cố gắng diễn đạt ý muốn hát cho ai hoặc vì mục đích gì một cách cụ thể và mạch lạc.

예시: I want to sing for my family and friends because their support motivates me to improve my singing skills.

제안: Bạn cần trả lời rõ ràng, tránh sử dụng từ không đúng hoặc không liên quan như 'Peacocks' hay 'shop skill'. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu trả lời có cấu trúc rõ ràng, mạch lạc. Sử dụng từ nối để liên kết các ý và tránh lặp từ.

예시: Absolutely yes, singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them relax after a hard working day. Moreover, it can improve skills like creativity and concentration. Music is an essential part of my life.

× I like sing very much because it helps me reduce stress after a hard working day and when I was in childhood I attend a music course and it helped me improve my concentrations and patient.

✓ I like singing very much because it helps me reduce stress after a hard working day and when I was a child I attended a music course and it helped me improve my concentration and patience.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the gerund form 'singing' to express enjoyment of an activity. 'Attend' should be in past tense 'attended' to match the past time reference. 'Concentrations' and 'patient' are incorrect; the correct nouns are 'concentration' and 'patience'. 'In childhood' is better expressed as 'a child'.

× Years When I was about 5 years old, I attend a music course to learn how to sing.

✓ When I was about 5 years old, I attended a music course to learn how to sing.

The verb 'attend' should be in the past tense 'attended' to agree with the past time reference 'when I was about 5 years old'. The word 'Years' at the beginning is unnecessary and should be removed.

× These classes have me improve my soft skills such as concentrations or creativity.

✓ These classes helped me improve my soft skills such as concentration and creativity.

The phrase 'have me improve' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'helped me improve'. Also, 'concentrations' should be singular 'concentration', and 'or' should be 'and' to list multiple skills.

× Umm Although I don't think professionally as now, I still enjoy musics.

✓ Although I don't think professionally now, I still enjoy music.

The phrase 'think professionally as now' is awkward; it should be 'think professionally now'. 'Musics' is incorrect; 'music' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized.

× Umm I want to sing uh for a famous single line Santo MTV umm mono because it is one of the umm bats umm model which I want to become.

✓ I want to sing for a famous single line on MTV because it is one of the best models I want to become.

The original sentence contains unclear and incorrect phrases. 'Single line Santo MTV umm mono' is unclear; assuming 'single line on MTV' is intended. 'Bats' should be 'best'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Umm absolutely yes, Peacocks, umm singings helps people uh, relish right? I'm a hard working day and umm improve shop skill like creativity or concentration and music is a essential part in my life.

✓ Absolutely yes, singing helps people relax, right? After a hard working day, it improves soft skills like creativity and concentration, and music is an essential part of my life.

'Singings' is incorrect; 'singing' is uncountable. 'Peacocks' is irrelevant and removed. 'Relish' is incorrect; 'relax' is appropriate. 'I'm a hard working day' is incorrect; 'After a hard working day' is correct. 'Shop skill' should be 'soft skills'. 'A essential' should be 'an essential'. 'In my life' should be 'of my life'.