Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevabınızda dilbilgisi hataları ve anlam belirsizlikleri var. "But I can because I don't have a great voice" ifadesi anlam açısından net değil. Ayrıca, cümleniz biraz dağınık ve gereksiz tekrarlar içeriyor. Daha doğal ve akıcı bir cevap için cümlelerinizi daha açık ve mantıklı bir şekilde kurmalısınız.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it is fun and relaxing. However, I don't have a great voice, so I usually sing alone to avoid embarrassing myself.

제안: Cevabınız genel olarak anlaşılır ancak "Uh" gibi dolgu kelimelerinden kaçınmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizde daha fazla bağlaç kullanarak akıcılığı artırabilirsiniz. Örneğin, neden şarkı söylemeyi öğrenmek istediğinizi daha detaylı açıklayabilirsiniz.

예시: No, I have never learned how to sing, but I would really like to try because I think singing beautifully is impressive. Although I doubt my talent, I believe practice can help me improve.

제안: Cevabınızda "than" yerine "then" kullanmalısınız ve "Umm" gibi dolgu kelimelerinden kaçınmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi daha net ve akıcı hale getirmek için bağlaçlar kullanabilirsiniz.

예시: First of all, I want to sing for myself, then for my friends and family. In summary, I just want to sing for the people I love.

제안: Cümlelerinizde dilbilgisi hataları var, örneğin "we suddenly gets happy" yerine "we suddenly get happy" olmalı. Ayrıca, daha spesifik ve mantıklı destekleyici detaylar ekleyerek cevabınızı güçlendirebilirsiniz.

예시: Yes, definitely. For example, at school when we feel bored, our teachers sing songs and it instantly lifts our mood. Also, I have seen that singing can help sick people feel better, so it surely brings happiness.

× But I can because I don't have a great voice, so I just think to myself alone.

✓ But I can't because I don't have a great voice, so I just think to myself alone.

The modal verb 'can' is used incorrectly here. The sentence intends to express inability, so 'can't' (cannot) should be used instead of 'can'.

× so I just think to myself alone.

✓ so I just think to myself.

The preposition 'alone' is unnecessary and awkward in this context. 'Think to myself' already conveys the meaning of thinking privately, so 'alone' should be omitted.

× And also I saw people who are sick get well by singing.

✓ And also I see people who are sick get well by singing.

The sentence mixes past tense 'saw' with present tense 'are sick'. To maintain consistency and general truth, present tense 'see' should be used.

× when we get bored our teachers sing a song and we suddenly gets happy.

✓ when we get bored our teachers sing a song and we suddenly get happy.

The verb 'gets' does not agree with the plural subject 'we'. The correct form is 'get' to match the plural subject.

× So yeah it's definitely brings happiness.

✓ So yeah it definitely brings happiness.

The contraction 'it's' (it is) is followed by 'brings', which causes a subject-verb agreement error. The correct subject is 'it', so 'it definitely brings' is correct.

× First of all, I want to sing for myself than for my friends and my family.

✓ First of all, I want to sing for myself rather than for my friends and my family.

The conjunction 'than' is used incorrectly here. The correct phrase is 'rather than' to express preference or comparison.