Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to avoid repeating the question in your answer and use correct verb forms. Also, keep your answer concise and natural by limiting it to 3-4 sentences. For example, you can say, "Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and relieve stress. I often sing with my friends during festivals and parties."

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and relieve stress. I often sing with my friends during festivals and parties, which makes the experience more enjoyable.

제안: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Please try to organize your thoughts clearly and use complete sentences. Directly answer the question first, then add supporting details with linking words. For example, "Yes, I learnt to sing when I was younger because it is part of my culture. I practiced regularly and even participated in local singing competitions as a hobby."

예시: Yes, I learnt to sing when I was younger because it is part of my culture. I practiced regularly and even participated in local singing competitions as a hobby.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by connecting ideas more smoothly and avoiding minor grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, "I want to sing for my family because they have always supported me. Singing at family gatherings is a tradition, and I feel relaxed when I perform for them."

예시: I want to sing for my family because they have always supported me. Singing at family gatherings is a tradition, and I feel relaxed when I perform for them.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but lacks clarity and proper sentence structure. Try to organize your points logically using linking words. For example, "Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps relieve stress and express emotions. Many people enjoy singing in the shower or car to feel better, and karaoke is a fun social activity."

예시: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps relieve stress and express emotions. Many people enjoy singing in the shower or car to feel better, and karaoke is a fun social activity.

× For example, I often singing with my friends during special occasion like festival or parties.

✓ For example, I often sing with my friends during special occasions like festivals or parties.

The verb 'singing' is incorrectly used after 'often'; the base form 'sing' should be used to indicate habitual action. Also, 'special occasion' and 'festival' should be plural to match the context of multiple events.

× Deletions when I I think deletions when I was younger. The part of his culture when I participate it that's as a hobby and part practice regularly it participate in a local singing competition family tradition.

✓ I think I learned when I was younger. It was part of my culture, and I participated regularly as a hobby and took part in local singing competitions as a family tradition.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Correct past tense verbs 'learned' and 'participated' are needed to describe past actions. Also, sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× They have always supported me at family gathering is a tradition.

✓ They have always supported me at family gatherings; it is a tradition.

'Family gathering' should be plural 'family gatherings' to indicate repeated events. Also, the sentence is split for clarity.

× Singing can make more people happy and it helps to express emotional relief, stress sing singing in the shower it helps when people sing in the shower or car to feel better and karaoke it is a fun.

✓ Singing can make more people happy and helps to express emotions and relieve stress. Singing in the shower or car helps people feel better, and karaoke is fun.

The original sentence is run-on and confusing. Conjunctions and sentence structure are corrected to separate ideas clearly. Also, 'emotional relief' is corrected to 'express emotions and relieve stress' for clarity.