Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and clear, but try to avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas more smoothly. Also, use linking words to connect your points better. For example, instead of repeating 'I do like singing', you can say 'I enjoy singing, especially in karaoke or with friends while playing the guitar, because it brings me joy and can be therapeutic.'

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing, especially when I do karaoke or sing with my friends while playing the guitar, because it brings me joy and can be very therapeutic for many people.

제안: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases like 'brushed the doll'. Try to use correct expressions and clearer sentences. Also, organize your answer with linking words to improve coherence. For example, say 'No, I have never learned singing professionally, although my dad encouraged me several times when I was a child. However, I ignored it back then, and now I regret it because I am not a good singer. I hope to start learning after my exams.'

예시: No, I have never learned singing professionally, although my dad encouraged me several times when I was a child. However, I ignored it back then, and now I regret it because I am not a good singer. I hope to start learning after my exams.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using better linking words and avoiding repetition. For example, instead of repeating 'for her', you can say 'I want to sing Hindi songs for my partner because she really likes them. Although I'm not good at singing now, I plan to learn so I can sing her favorite song, "UMM", which is my dream.'

예시: I want to sing Hindi songs for my partner because she really likes them. Although I'm not good at singing now, I plan to learn so I can sing her favorite song, "UMM", which is my dream.

제안: Your answer is thoughtful and personal, which is good. To improve, try to use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly and avoid repeating similar phrases. For example, you can say 'Singing definitely brings happiness to many people. In my personal experience, it has been very therapeutic, helping me cope with tragic events in my life. Therefore, I believe it can have the same effect on others.'

예시: Singing definitely brings happiness to many people. In my personal experience, it has been very therapeutic, helping me cope with tragic events in my life. Therefore, I believe it can have the same effect on others.

× No, I never learned singing professionally but my dad did bring it up multiple times while I was a child.

✓ No, I never learned singing professionally but my dad did bring it up multiple times when I was a child.

The phrase 'while I was a child' is less appropriate here; 'when I was a child' is the correct expression to indicate a time period in the past. 'While' is used for simultaneous actions, but 'when' is better for indicating a time frame.

× But I brushed the doll back then.

✓ But I brushed it off back then.

The original sentence 'I brushed the doll back then' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'I brushed it off back then,' meaning the speaker ignored or dismissed the idea. 'Brushed the doll' is nonsensical here.

× because a really bad singer now, but I do wish to start singing very soon after my exams have ended.

✓ because I am a really bad singer now, but I do wish to start singing very soon after my exams have ended.

The original sentence is missing the subject 'I am' before 'a really bad singer now.' Without the subject and verb, the sentence is incomplete and grammatically incorrect.

× So that is why I've decided to learn singing after a few months and it's my dream to actually sing her a favorite song which is called UMM.

✓ So that is why I've decided to learn singing in a few months and it's my dream to actually sing her a favorite song which is called UMM.

The phrase 'after a few months' suggests a time after some months have passed, but the intended meaning is to start learning singing within a few months. 'In a few months' is the correct prepositional phrase to indicate starting something within that time frame.