Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但句子结构较为简单，且内容重复。建议使用更丰富的词汇表达情感，并避免重复相似内容。

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it allows me to express a wide range of emotions. For instance, when I'm feeling down, singing helps me feel better, and when I'm happy, it amplifies my joy.

제안: 回答不够连贯，语法和表达存在错误。建议使用完整句子，清晰描述学习唱歌的经历，并使用连接词使表达更自然。

예시: Yes, I have learned how to sing during music lessons at school, where my teacher taught us proper techniques to sing beautifully.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，表达不够自然。建议使用正确的时态和词汇，清晰表达想为谁唱歌及原因。

예시: I would like to sing for myself and my loved ones because singing is a heartfelt way to show my affection and care.

제안: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，句子较长且不够流畅。建议简化句子结构，使用恰当的连接词，使表达更清晰。

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because a beautiful song can convey love and peace, uniting people through shared emotions.

× Yes, in my school, the music lessons, my teacher told us how to sing. Sing beautiful.

✓ Yes, in my school music lessons, my teacher told us how to sing beautifully.

这里“Sing beautiful”是错误的表达，应该用副词修饰动词，正确形式是“sing beautifully”。动词后面修饰方式应为副词，而不是形容词。

× I would like to sing for myself and the person who I loved because I think singing can show my love and it's a way to express my friendly and careful.

✓ I would like to sing for myself and the person whom I love because I think singing can show my love and it's a way to express my friendliness and care.

“the person who I loved”时态不对，应该用现在时“love”，且关系代词用“whom”更合适。后半句“express my friendly and careful”中“friendly”和“careful”是形容词，应该用名词形式“friendliness”和“care”来表达抽象概念。

× Yes I agree with this opinion because I think a great song can bring people who listening the love and peace and it's a way to use the same words to bring people love.

✓ Yes, I agree with this opinion because I think a great song can bring love and peace to people who are listening, and it's a way to use the same words to bring people love.

“people who listening the love and peace”缺少动词，应该是“people who are listening to love and peace”，但表达不通顺，改为“bring love and peace to people who are listening”更自然。介词“to”用于表示“bring...to...”。