Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议注意时态和单复数的正确使用，避免重复和冗长的句子，同时增加连接词使表达更连贯。

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it is one of my favorite hobbies. When I was a child, I often sang songs by my idol, Jalen Joe. I especially like Jiang Zhou songs because they have beautiful lyrics and a gentle melody. Singing helps me escape from worries and enter a wonderful world.

제안: 回答不够清晰，语法和表达混乱，建议理清时间顺序，使用正确的时态和句子结构，避免口语填充词，表达要简洁明了。

예시: Yes, I started learning to sing when I was quite young, maybe around five years old. My mother took me to a singing club where I received formal lessons. I really enjoyed it and have loved singing ever since.

제안: 回答中表达不清且有语法错误，建议使用完整句子，明确表达意图，使用连接词使句子更流畅，避免使用不恰当的词汇。

예시: I would like to sing for my family and close friends because it helps strengthen our bond. Moreover, singing can make people feel happy and even overjoyed, which can lift their spirits significantly.

제안: 回答语法错误较多，表达不连贯，建议使用正确的句子结构，增加具体细节，使用连接词使表达更自然。

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people. For example, at birthday parties, singing the birthday song is a common tradition that makes everyone feel joyful and celebrated.

× I think it's my hobbies.

✓ I think it's my hobby.

这里'hobbies'是复数，而前面用的是单数形式的'it is'，主谓不一致。应使用单数'hobby'来保持一致。

× During my child, I usually singing, you know, the Jalen Joe is my idol.

✓ During my childhood, I usually sang, you know, Jalen Joe is my idol.

'During my child'应为'childhood'表示童年；'usually singing'时态错误，应为过去时'sang'。

× So I usually sing in Jiang Zhou songs.

✓ So I usually sing Jiang Zhou songs.

'sing in songs'用法错误，正确表达是'sing songs'，不需要介词'in'。

× So it can take a meager to the fantastic world.

✓ So it can take meager to the fantastic world.

'take a meager'结构不正确，且'meager'用法不当，可能想表达'take me to a fantastic world'。

× Forget troubles and worry.

✓ Forget troubles and worries.

'worry'应为复数'worries'，与'troubles'保持一致。

× Yeah, I'm thinking maybe early in my 50s age.

✓ Yeah, I think maybe when I was in my early 50s.

'I'm thinking'时态错误，应为一般现在时表达想法；'in my 50s age'表达不自然，应为'in my early 50s'。

× I think I'm so young, but I very, uh, like this Hobbit.

✓ I think I was so young, but I really liked this hobby.

描述过去时应使用过去时态；'like this Hobbit'应为'hobby'，且动词应为过去时'liked'。

× So my mom's take me, go to the Sing club, learn it.

✓ So my mom took me to the singing club to learn it.

时态应为过去时'took'；'go to the Sing club'应为'go to the singing club'；句子结构需调整。

× Yeah, I want to sing for maybe my family and close friends because I think it's a good way to 'cause our bonding another is can make others happy and over the moon maybe it can help their cherry out a lot.

✓ Yeah, I want to sing for maybe my family and close friends because I think it's a good way to strengthen our bonding, and it can make others happy and over the moon. Maybe it can help cheer them up a lot.

'cause'应为完整表达'strengthen'或'cause'的正确用法；'bonding another'表达不清；'is can'语法错误；'cherry out'应为'cheer up'。

× Yes I have seen have more Empress for others because if there when birthday party there usually a singing birthday song so I think it can make people feel happiness.

✓ Yes, I have seen more happiness for others because when there is a birthday party, there is usually a singing birthday song, so I think it can make people feel happy.

'have more Empress'应为'more happiness'；句子缺少连词和介词；'feel happiness'应为'feel happy'。