Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は自然で効果的ですが、'and and'の繰り返しや'sings my mood'の誤りなど、文法と語彙の正確さを向上させる必要があります。また、文の長さがやや長いので、簡潔にまとめることを意識しましょう。

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. For example, singing along to my favorite songs motivates me to study more effectively and keeps me energetic during activities like running or playing sports. It also lifts my mood and makes me feel happier throughout the day.

제안: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現（例：'But indeed it wasn't very sad, but good song'）が見られます。より明確で自然な表現を使い、文のつながりを改善しましょう。

예시: Yes, I learned how to sing when I participated in a musical theater. One of my favorite songs was "Stand By Me," which is a good song, not a sad one. We competed in a contest and finished in sixth place.

제안: 内容は良いですが、'I hope my songs can't lift my friend's spirit'の否定表現が誤っています。肯定的な表現に直し、より自然な英語にしましょう。

예시: I don't want to sing for a specific person because I enjoy singing for everyone. One day, if I have the chance, I would like to become a singer-songwriter. I hope my songs can lift my friends' spirits when they are feeling tired or stressed, helping them feel more energetic and relaxed.

제안: 回答は明確で内容も良いですが、'boost up mood'の表現は不自然なので、'boost their mood'などに修正するとより自然です。また、文を2つに分けて読みやすくしましょう。

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people, even when they are depressed or sick. Music can always relax them, boost their mood, and create an energetic and uplifting atmosphere.

× Singing also lists my mood and makes me feel happier throughout the day.

✓ Singing also lifts my mood and makes me feel happier throughout the day.

The word 'lists' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'lifts' which means to raise or improve. This is a common confusion between similar sounding words. Using 'lifts' correctly conveys the intended meaning of improving mood.

× Yes, when I was in a musical theater, I learned how to sing.

✓ Yes, when I was in musical theater, I learned how to sing.

The phrase 'in a musical theater' is incorrect because 'musical theater' here refers to a type of activity or field, not a specific theater building. The article 'a' should be omitted to correctly express the idea.

× One of my favorite songs was Stand By Me. But indeed it wasn't very sad, but good song.

✓ One of my favorite songs was Stand By Me. But indeed it wasn't a very sad, but a good song.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'very sad' and 'good song'. In English, singular countable nouns require an article. Adding 'a' before these adjectives and nouns corrects the sentence structure.

× We kind of won the competition and we stayed in 6th place.

✓ We kind of won the competition and we stayed at 6th place.

The correct preposition to indicate position or rank is 'at' rather than 'in'. Using 'at' properly indicates the specific place achieved in the competition.

× I hope my songs can't lift my friend's spirit when they are feeling tired or stressed, so they can feel more energetic and relaxed.

✓ I hope my songs can lift my friends' spirits when they are feeling tired or stressed, so they can feel more energetic and relaxed.

The modal verb 'can't' contradicts the intended positive hope. It should be 'can' to express the desire for the songs to have a positive effect. Also, 'friend's spirit' should be plural 'friends' spirits' to match 'they' and generalize to multiple friends.