Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了真实感受，但语言稍显重复，且缺少连接词使表达更流畅。建议减少重复，使用连接词如“because”或“so”来增强逻辑性。

예시: I don't like singing because I'm not confident in my ability, so I often feel shy when performing in front of others.

제안: 回答中有较多语气词，影响流畅性。建议减少填充词，使用更准确的词汇，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: I haven't learned how to sing because I'm not very interested in it, as I prefer other activities that help me relax.

제안: 回答内容具体且有感情，但表达稍显口语化。建议使用更正式的表达，并注意语法，如“think for”应为“sing for”。

예시: If I had to choose, I would sing for my mother because she has cared for me with great dedication for over 20 years.

제안: 回答中有重复且表达不清晰，且出现了“seeing”错误词汇。建议避免重复，注意用词准确，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: I believe singing can bring happiness to many people, but personally, it is not the best way for me to relax or feel happy.

× there are other recreation, uh, allowing me to relax.

✓ there are other recreations, uh, allowing me to relax.

recreation 是可数名词，表示“娱乐活动”，复数形式应为 recreations。此处应使用复数形式以匹配前面的复数谓语动词 are。

× I haven't learned how to sing because I'm not extremely interested in singing.

✓ I haven't learnt how to sing because I'm not extremely interested in singing.

learn 的过去分词有两种拼写：learned 和 learnt。英式英语中更常用 learnt，且上下文可能偏向英式表达，建议统一使用 learnt。

× If I have to choose someone, I would definitely think for my mom because she raised me up with great care and dedication over 20 years.

✓ If I have to choose someone, I would definitely think of my mom because she raised me with great care and dedication over 20 years.

动词 think 后应接介词 of 表示“想起”，而非 for。raise me up 中的 up 多余，raise 本身即可表达“抚养”。

× I feel shy or embarrassed when I have to sit in front of people.

✓ I feel shy or embarrassed when I have to sing in front of people.

原句中缺少动词，导致表达不完整。应补充动词 sing，使句子完整且符合语境。

× seeing is not the best way to help me relax or bring happiness to me.

✓ singing is not the best way to help me relax or bring happiness to me.

原句中 seeing 应为 singing，因上下文讨论的是唱歌，使用 seeing 是错误的代词用法。