Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答较为自然且内容丰富，但句子结构稍显复杂且有语法错误，如“gives me opportunity”应为“gives me the opportunity”。建议简化句子结构，注意冠词使用，并避免冗长。

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and forget about daily stress. Also, singing with friends during gatherings creates happy moments and strengthens our friendships.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误，如“She tell me”应为“She told me”，且表达不够清晰，内容混乱。建议使用更清晰的句子结构，准确表达学习经历和内容。

예시: Yes, I learned to sing from a friend who studies music at Berkeley. She taught me techniques to control my emotions while singing and how to perform different scenes effectively.

제안: 回答表达了个人观点，但句子较长且结构不够清晰。建议分句表达，使用连接词使逻辑更连贯。

예시: I don't usually sing for others. For me, singing is a personal way to express my feelings and relieve stress, rather than a performance for an audience.

제안: 回答内容不够相关且表达混乱，缺乏具体和连贯的支持细节。建议直接回答问题，并用具体例子或原因支持观点。

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express emotions and connect with others. For example, singing in a choir can create a strong sense of community and joy.

× Also, it gives me opportunity to forge new relationships with friends who also like singing during the gatherings and will create joyful times.

✓ Also, it gives me the opportunity to forge new relationships with friends who also like singing during the gatherings and will create joyful times.

这里缺少冠词“the”，因为“opportunity”是可数名词，表示特定的机会时需要用定冠词“the”。建议在“opportunity”前加上“the”。

× She tell me a lot about how to avoid my feelings during the singing and then a lot of scenes.

✓ She tells me a lot about how to avoid my feelings during the singing and then a lot of scenes.

主语是第三人称单数“she”，谓语动词应加-s，正确形式是“tells”。建议注意主谓一致，第三人称单数动词需加-s。

× She tell me a lot about how to avoid my feelings during the singing and then a lot of scenes.

✓ She tells me a lot about how to control my feelings during singing and about many scenes.

原句结构混乱，“avoid my feelings during the singing and then a lot of scenes”表达不清晰。应改为“control my feelings during singing and about many scenes”，使句子更通顺，表达更准确。建议理清句子结构，确保表达完整清晰。

× I consider singing as a wonderful way to release my stress and escape from the pressure of the daily routine.

✓ I consider singing a wonderful way to release my stress and escape the pressure of the daily routine.

动词“consider”后不需要介词“as”，直接加宾语即可；“escape”后一般不加“from”，直接加宾语。建议去掉“as”和“from”，使表达更地道。

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ For whom do you want to sing?

正式英语中，疑问句中介词应放在句首，使用“whom”作为宾格代词。建议将“Who do you want to sing for?”改为“For whom do you want to sing?”以符合正式语法。

× I don't want to think for anyone because I consider singing to be something about myself when I can express my feelings and release my stress, and I have not connected singing to performance to others.

✓ I don't want to think about anyone because I consider singing to be something about myself when I can express my feelings and release my stress, and I have not connected singing with performing for others.

“think for anyone”用法错误，应为“think about anyone”；“connected singing to performance to others”表达不准确，应为“connected singing with performing for others”。建议注意介词搭配和表达准确性。

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

“learnt”和“learned”都是“learn”的过去分词，前者为英式英语，后者为美式英语。根据上下文使用美式英语“learned”更合适。建议统一时态和英语变体。

× You know, throughout the history there were thousands of workers who developed. They saw some when they were walking.

✓ You know, throughout history there have been thousands of workers who developed skills. They saw some things when they were walking.

“throughout the history”应为“throughout history”；“workers who developed”后应补充宾语；“They saw some”不完整，应补充宾语“things”。建议补全句子成分，使表达完整。

× You know, throughout the history there were thousands of workers who developed.

✓ You know, throughout history there were thousands of workers who developed.

“history”前不需要定冠词“the”，因为这里指的是历史的整体概念。建议去掉“the”，使表达更自然。