Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "leaves my mood" which should be "lifts my mood." Also, avoid redundancy like "makes me makes the experience very pleasant." Try to use more precise vocabulary and keep sentences concise and natural.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my feelings and lifts my mood. Whenever I sing, I feel relaxed and happy, which makes the experience very enjoyable.

제안: There are several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases, such as "singing Class A" and "lessons of me learn." Also, "local skills" is unclear; perhaps you meant "vocal skills." Try to use correct sentence structures and clearer vocabulary to improve clarity and naturalness.

예시: Yes, I took a singing class a few years ago because I wanted to improve my vocal skills. The lessons taught me proper breathing techniques and how to control my pitch better. It was a fun experience that boosted my confidence in singing.

제안: Your answer is quite good but the phrase "feeling oppressed by an audience" is unnatural. Consider using "feeling nervous" or "feeling pressured." Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid overly complex expressions.

예시: To be honest, I mostly want to sing for myself because it helps me relax and express my emotions. Singing alone allows me to enjoy the music without feeling nervous in front of an audience, which makes the experience more personal and fulfilling.

제안: There are some errors such as "expect their emotions" which should be "express their emotions." Also, avoid sentence fragments like "In general." Use linking words to improve coherence and be more specific in your explanations.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions and relieve stress. For example, when I sing my favorite songs, I feel more relaxed and joyful, which helps improve my mood. In general, music and singing have a powerful impact on mental well-being.

× I enjoy singing because it helps me express my feelings and leaves my mood.

✓ I enjoy singing because it helps me express my feelings and lifts my mood.

The verb 'leaves' is incorrectly used here; the correct verb is 'lifts' to indicate improving or raising one's mood. Using 'leaves' in this context is incorrect because it implies abandoning or departing, which does not fit the intended meaning.

× Whenever I sing I feel relaxed and happy which makes me makes the experience very pleasant.

✓ Whenever I sing, I feel relaxed and happy, which makes the experience very pleasant.

The sentence contains a repeated verb 'makes me makes' which is incorrect. Removing the extra 'makes me' corrects the sentence. Also, commas are added for clarity and correct sentence structure.

× The lessons of me learn proper breathing techniques and how to control my pitch better.

✓ The lessons helped me learn proper breathing techniques and how to control my pitch better.

The phrase 'lessons of me learn' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'lessons helped me learn' where 'me' is the object pronoun receiving the action. This correction clarifies the sentence and uses proper pronoun and verb structure.

× I took a singing Class A few years ago because I wanted to improve my local skills.

✓ I took a singing class a few years ago because I wanted to improve my vocal skills.

The word 'Class' should not be capitalized here, and 'local skills' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'vocal skills' relating to singing. Correcting capitalization and word choice improves clarity and accuracy.

× Sitting alone allows me to enjoy the music without feeling oppressed by an audience, which makes the experience more personal and fully fulfilling.

✓ Sitting alone allows me to enjoy the music without feeling oppressed by an audience, which makes the experience more personal and fulfilling.

The phrase 'fully fulfilling' is redundant; 'fulfilling' alone suffices. Also, 'oppressed by an audience' is unusual; however, since it is not in the problem list, only the redundancy is addressed here.

× Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people because it allows them to expect their emotions and relieve stress.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions and relieve stress.

The word 'expect' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'express' to indicate showing or conveying emotions. This correction aligns with the intended meaning.

× In general. Music and singing have powerful impact on your mental well-being.

✓ In general, music and singing have a powerful impact on your mental well-being.

The original sentence incorrectly uses a period after 'In general' which fragments the sentence. Also, 'powerful impact' needs the article 'a' before it. Correcting punctuation and article usage improves sentence structure and clarity.