Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、繰り返しや冗長な表現があり、自然な英語表現に改善が必要です。例えば、"happy happiness"は不自然で、ストレスを感じた時に歌う理由を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. Whenever I feel stressed, singing helps me to calm down and forget my worries.

제안: 文法の誤りと不自然な表現が目立ちます。"lectures I have to sing how to sing a song"は意味が不明瞭です。YouTubeで歌のレッスンを受けていることを簡潔に述べると良いでしょう。

예시: I have never taken formal singing lessons, but I often watch singing tutorials on YouTube to improve my skills whenever I want.

제안: 内容は良いですが、"for what she's done to me so"の部分が不自然です。理由を明確にし、文を簡潔にまとめるとより良くなります。

예시: I want to sing for my mother because I really appreciate everything she has done for me.

제안: 回答が断片的で意味が通じにくいです。理由を明確にし、文をつなげて論理的に話す練習が必要です。

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions. For example, many people enjoy going to karaoke or watching their favorite singers on TV.

× Ah, I like singing because it helps me, it gives me a sense of happiness and happy happiness.

✓ Ah, I like singing because it helps me; it gives me a sense of happiness and joy.

The phrase 'happy happiness' is redundant and incorrect. 'Happiness' is a noun, and 'happy' is an adjective; combining them is unnecessary. Using 'joy' or just 'happiness' is more appropriate.

× And sometimes when I feel stressed out, when I feel stressed.

✓ And sometimes when I feel stressed out.

The sentence is incomplete and repetitive. The second clause 'when I feel stressed' is unnecessary and creates a fragment. Removing it corrects the sentence structure.

× I've never learned how to sing but now there are many lectures I have to sing how to sing a song in YouTube so I could learn how to sing whenever I want to.

✓ I've never learned how to sing, but now there are many lessons on YouTube teaching how to sing songs, so I can learn whenever I want to.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect verb usage. 'Lectures I have to sing how to sing' is incorrect; 'lessons on YouTube teaching how to sing' is clearer. Also, 'could' should be 'can' to express ability in present/future.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

No correction needed; the sentence is grammatically correct.

× I want to sing for my mother because I really appreciate my mother for what she's done to me so.

✓ I want to sing for my mother because I really appreciate what she's done for me.

The phrase 'appreciate my mother for what she's done to me so' is awkward and redundant. It's better to say 'appreciate what she's done for me' to express gratitude clearly.

× I sing. Singing can bring happiness to people because. People love going to karaoke and watching YouTube or TV. What this artist singing?

✓ I think singing can bring happiness to people because people love going to karaoke and watching YouTube or TV to see artists sing.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'Because.' is incomplete. 'What this artist singing?' is ungrammatical. The correction combines ideas into coherent sentences and corrects the question form.