Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is good but needs to be more natural and clear. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases like 'connect with my during social gatherness'. Try to use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid redundancy. Also, check grammar and vocabulary for accuracy.

예시: Yes, I really like singing because it helps me express my emotions and relieve stress. For example, whether I am feeling happy or sad, singing my favorite songs always lifts my mood. Moreover, it is a fun way to connect with others during social gatherings.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Use simple and clear sentences. Provide a direct answer first, then add supporting details with linking words. Avoid confusing phrases like 'show her a reciprocal vocal training'.

예시: Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was in school, I took part in vocal training where I learned about pitch and rhythm. Singing has always been my passion, and it has helped me improve my confidence and technique.

제안: Your answer is quite good with clear structure and relevant vocabulary. To improve, try to use more varied linking words and avoid minor mistakes like 'love ones' instead of 'loved ones'. Also, keep sentences concise and natural.

예시: I'd like to sing for my family and close friends because they are very supportive and appreciate my efforts. This motivates me to perform better. Furthermore, sharing music with loved ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere that strengthens our bond.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and contains unclear words like 'outfitful'. Make sure to complete your sentences and use correct vocabulary. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion, using linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people. It allows individuals to express their emotions and can be very uplifting, especially when people are feeling down.

× Yes, I really like singing because it helps me to express my emotion and relief.

✓ Yes, I really like singing because it helps me to express my emotions and find relief.

The word 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' because it refers to various feelings. Also, 'relief' needs a verb to show the action, so 'find relief' is correct here.

× It's a fun way to connect with my during social gatherness.

✓ It's a fun way to connect with my friends during social gatherings.

The phrase 'connect with my' is incomplete; it needs an object like 'friends'. Also, 'gatherness' is incorrect; the correct word is 'gatherings'.

× Yes, I have long held the same.

✓ Yes, I have long held the same interest.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'interest' clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence structure.

× I took part in show her a reciprocal vocal training and learned about pitch and rhythm.

✓ I took part in a vocal training program and learned about pitch and rhythm.

The phrase 'show her a reciprocal' is incorrect and confusing. It should be removed to make the sentence clear and grammatically correct.

× Singing has always been a passion for mine and it also helps me my confidence and technique.

✓ Singing has always been a passion of mine and it also helps me improve my confidence and technique.

The phrase 'passion for mine' is incorrect; it should be 'passion of mine'. Also, 'helps me my confidence' is missing a verb; 'helps me improve my confidence' is correct.

× Additionally, sharing music with love ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere that strengthens our bond.

✓ Additionally, sharing music with loved ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere that strengthens our bond.

The phrase 'love ones' is incorrect; the correct term is 'loved ones'.

× Singing allows individuals to express their emotions and can be very outfitful, specially when people don't.

✓ Singing allows individuals to express their emotions and can be very uplifting, especially when people don't.

The word 'outfitful' is incorrect; the correct word is 'uplifting'. Also, 'specially' should be 'especially' in this context.