Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is quite long and a bit repetitive, especially with phrases like 'whole time' repeated. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, some phrases like 'bottom singer' are unclear or unnatural. Instead, use simple, clear expressions. Try to organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing even though I'm not very skilled. Whenever my favourite artists release new songs, I listen to them a few times and then sing along, which helps me relax and relieve stress.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains awkward phrasing like 'I haven't learnt of learning to sing.' Try to use simpler, clearer sentences. Also, avoid repeating ideas unnecessarily. Start with a direct answer, then add a reason or explanation using linking words for coherence.

예시: No, I have never taken singing lessons because I'm happy singing casually. I haven't planned to learn formally in the future either.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but the phrase 'extension of love I have in my heart' sounds unnatural. Try to use more common expressions and keep sentences concise. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: If I had to sing for someone, it would be my dad. I want to dedicate a song to thank him for all his hard work and to show how much I love him.

제안: Your answer addresses the question well but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words to improve flow. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary instead of vague phrases like 'chaotic to them'.

예시: I believe singing can bring happiness to many people because it helps them relax. However, some might find it stressful, so it really depends on the individual.

× You can call me as a bottom singer, but as soon as new song of my favorite artists come up, I usually sing them, listen to them for two or three times and I remember and start singing them for the whole time.

✓ You can call me a bottom singer, but as soon as a new song by my favorite artists comes out, I usually sing it, listen to it two or three times, remember it, and start singing it the whole time.

The phrase 'call me as a bottom singer' is incorrect; 'call me a bottom singer' is correct because 'call' is followed directly by the noun without 'as'. 'New song of my favorite artists' should be 'a new song by my favorite artists' to correctly express possession. 'Come up' is better replaced with 'comes out' for new songs. 'Sing them' and 'listen to them' should be singular 'it' because 'a new song' is singular. Also, 'for two or three times' should be 'two or three times' without 'for'. The sentence is long and needs commas to separate actions clearly.

× Not really, as I previously mentioned, I'm not a professional singer at all and I haven't learnt of learning to sing.

✓ Not really, as I previously mentioned, I'm not a professional singer at all and I haven't learnt to sing.

The phrase 'haven't learnt of learning to sing' is incorrect. The correct form is 'haven't learnt to sing' because 'learn' is followed by the infinitive verb without 'of'. The use of 'of' here is unnecessary and incorrect.

× Also I haven't thought of learning in the coming future.

✓ Also, I haven't thought about learning in the near future.

The phrase 'thought of learning in the coming future' is awkward. The correct preposition is 'about' after 'thought'. Also, 'coming future' is redundant; 'near future' or simply 'future' is better.

× I would love to dedicate a song to him for all the hard work he has done for me and to show the extension of love I have in my heart for him.

✓ I would love to dedicate a song to him for all the hard work he has done for me and to show the extent of love I have in my heart for him.

The word 'extension' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'extent' to express the degree or amount of love. This is a vocabulary choice rather than a pronoun error, but it affects clarity.

× But for others on the other hand, it might feel chaotic to them.

✓ But for others, on the other hand, it might feel chaotic to them.

The phrase 'others on the other hand' needs a comma after 'others' to separate the contrasting phrase 'on the other hand'. This improves sentence clarity and flow.