Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多いです。例えば、「Thinking I like singing since I was a child」は不自然で、「I have liked singing since I was a child」のように現在完了形を使うと良いでしょう。また、「beautifulness」はあまり使われない単語なので、「beauty」や「melody」などの自然な語彙に置き換えましょう。さらに、理由を述べる際に接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより効果的です。

예시: I have liked singing since I was a child because I enjoy the beauty of the melody and rhythm. Singing makes me feel comfortable and relaxed.

제안: 文法の誤りが目立ちます。例えば、「I've learned singing」よりも「I've learned how to sing」や「I've taken singing lessons」の方が自然です。また、「I have belonged」は過去形の「I belonged」を使うべきです。さらに、「beautiful experience」は不自然なので、「wonderful experience」や「great experience」にすると良いでしょう。文をつなぐ接続詞も加えると流れが良くなります。

예시: Yes, I've learned how to sing. When I was a teenager, I belonged to a music club called Scrub, where I learned many Japanese songs. It was a wonderful experience for me.

제안: 内容は面白いですが、最後の文が不完全で不自然です。「It is a good way to communicate with」では、誰とコミュニケーションを取るのかが明確でありません。例えば、「It is a good way to communicate with my cat」とする必要があります。また、「childish songs」よりも「children's songs」の方が適切です。

예시: I want to sing for my cat. I sing some children's songs to my cat every day at home. It is a good way to communicate with my pet.

제안: 最後の文は意味が不明瞭で文法的にも誤りがあります。「It is ring people influence many people's all over the world」は不自然で、正しい表現に直す必要があります。例えば、「It is a movie that has influenced many people all over the world」と言い換えましょう。また、具体的な映画名を挙げると説得力が増します。

예시: Yes, I definitely think singing can bring happiness to many people. For example, the famous movie "The Sound of Music" has influenced many people all over the world.

× Thinking I like singing since I was a child because I feel the beautifulness of the score and rhythm of the music while I'm singing.

✓ I have liked singing since I was a child because I feel the beauty of the score and rhythm of the music while I'm singing.

'Thinking' is incorrectly used at the beginning; the sentence should start with the subject 'I'. Also, 'beautifulness' is not commonly used; 'beauty' is the correct noun form. The present perfect 'have liked' is appropriate to express a state from the past until now.

× I feel the beautifulness of the score and rhythm of the music while I'm singing.

✓ I feel the beauty of the score and rhythm of the music while I'm singing.

'Beautifulness' is not a standard English word; the correct noun form is 'beauty'. Using 'beauty' makes the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I've learned singing.

✓ Yes, I've learned to sing.

'Learned' is correct in present perfect, but the verb 'learn' is usually followed by 'to' plus base verb when referring to acquiring a skill. So, 'learned to sing' is correct.

× When I was a teenager I I have belonged a music club called Scrub and I learned many Japanese songs.

✓ When I was a teenager, I belonged to a music club called Scrub and learned many Japanese songs.

'Belonged' is a past tense verb and should not be used with 'have'. Also, the verb 'belong' requires the preposition 'to' when indicating membership. The repeated 'I' is a typo and should be removed.

× That was my beautiful experience.

✓ That was a wonderful experience for me.

'Beautiful' is generally used to describe physical appearance or aesthetics, not experiences. 'Wonderful' or 'great' are more appropriate adjectives to describe experiences.

× I sing some childish songs for my cat every day at home. It is a good way to communicate with.

✓ I sing some childish songs to my cat every day at home. It is a good way to communicate with him.

'Sing to' is the correct preposition when indicating the recipient of singing. Also, 'communicate with' requires an object; 'him' refers to the cat and completes the sentence.

× It is ring people influence many people's all over the world.

✓ It is a movie that influences many people all over the world.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Ring people influence many people's all over the world' is incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects the structure.