Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 또한, 중복된 표현('my singing' 반복)과 부정확한 어휘 사용('humble' 대신 'poor' 또는 'not good')이 있습니다. 간결하고 명확한 문장으로 표현하고, 두 문장을 연결하는 접속사를 사용해 보세요.

예시: I don't like singing because I think my singing skills are poor, and I'm afraid to sing in front of people.

제안: 문장이 명확하지 않고, 'learn about singing and my life'라는 표현이 혼란스럽습니다. 문장을 간결하게 만들고, 조건문을 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 또한, 'great chance' 대신 'good opportunity'가 더 적절합니다.

예시: I haven't had the chance to learn how to sing, but if I get a good opportunity, I would like to learn because it would be fun.

제안: 'self satisfied'는 부적절한 표현입니다. 'self-satisfaction' 또는 'for my own enjoyment' 같은 표현을 사용하세요. 또한, 문장 구조를 개선하여 더 자연스럽게 만드세요.

예시: I want to sing for myself because I believe that activities like singing or dancing are for personal enjoyment.

제안: 문장이 길고 복잡하며 문법 오류가 많습니다. 'them TV show' 대신 'TV shows'를 사용하고, 문장을 두 개로 나누어 명확하게 표현하세요. 또한, 'get tears' 대신 'shed tears'가 자연스럽습니다.

예시: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people. For example, when I watch TV shows where singers perform on stage, some people are moved by the songs and even shed tears.

× my singing skill is too humble that nobody can listen to me

✓ my singing skill is so humble that nobody can listen to me

The phrase 'too humble that' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'so humble that' to indicate the degree causing the result. 'Too' implies an excessive degree that prevents something, but 'so...that' is used to show cause and effect here.

× I'm afraid to sing in front of the people

✓ I'm afraid to sing in front of people

The definite article 'the' before 'people' is unnecessary here because it refers to people in general, not specific people. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural.

× I don't have any chance to learn how to sing

✓ I haven't had any chance to learn how to sing

The present perfect tense 'haven't had' is more appropriate to express the experience up to now. Also, 'any chance' is correct, but the tense needed correction.

× if I get a great chance, I want to learn about singing and my life, so it'll be fun

✓ if I get a great chance, I will want to learn about singing and my life, so it'll be fun

The sentence mixes present tense 'want' with a future condition 'if I get'. Using 'will want' aligns the verb tense with the future condition.

× I want to sing for myself 'cause I think all the actions, just like singing or dancing is self satisfied

✓ I want to sing for myself because I think all actions, like singing or dancing, are self-satisfying

'Self satisfied' should be 'self-satisfying' as an adjective describing actions. Also, 'all the actions' should be 'all actions' for generalization, and 'just like' can be simplified to 'like'.

× some people get moved by that singer's song and usually they get tears by listening them

✓ some people are moved by that singer's song and usually they get tears by listening to it

'Get moved' should be passive 'are moved'. 'Get tears' is incorrect; better to say 'get tears in their eyes' or 'are moved to tears'. Also, 'listening them' should be 'listening to it' because 'listen' requires 'to' and the object is singular 'song'.