Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by avoiding redundancy and making sentences more natural. For example, instead of repeating 'favorite songs' and 'favorite artist's song', you can combine ideas and use linking words to make your answer more coherent and concise.

예시: I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and forget about stress. For instance, singing songs by my favorite artists allows me to express my emotions and feel happy.

제안: Your answer is short and lacks clarity. Try to use complete sentences and correct grammar. Also, add linking words to explain your point more clearly and naturally.

예시: No, I have never learned how to sing professionally. I only sing as a hobby and have never tried to take professional lessons.

제안: Your answer is too long and repetitive. Try to organize your ideas clearly with linking words and avoid repeating the same phrases. Also, use more formal expressions instead of 'wanna'.

예시: I want to sing for people all over the world because I hope my voice can reach many listeners and inspire them positively.

제안: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words. Also, avoid repeating words like 'that that'.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For example, when I feel sad, listening to a good song helps me relax and improves my mood.

× I really love to sing my favorite artist's song.

✓ I really love singing my favorite artist's songs.

The verb 'love' is commonly followed by the gerund form '-ing' when expressing enjoyment of an activity. Also, 'songs' should be plural to match 'favorite artist's' multiple songs.

× No never, I just do it for my hobbies.

✓ No, never. I just do it as a hobby.

The sentence lacks proper punctuation and uses 'hobbies' incorrectly. 'Hobby' is singular here because it refers to the activity of singing. Also, 'No never' should be separated by a comma or period for clarity.

× I never try it like a professional things.

✓ I never try it like a professional thing.

'Things' is plural but should be singular 'thing' to match 'a professional'. The phrase 'like a professional thing' is better expressed as 'like a professional' or 'like a professional singer'.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

The question is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I wanna sing for the whole world, just want the whole world to see me as a singer and want my voice to be heard all around the world as much as many people so that I can make something good out of it.

✓ I want to sing for the whole world. I want the whole world to see me as a singer and want my voice to be heard by as many people as possible so that I can make something good out of it.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper conjunctions and punctuation. Breaking it into shorter sentences improves clarity. Also, 'wanna' is informal; 'want to' is more appropriate. The phrase 'as much as many people' is incorrect; it should be 'by as many people as possible'.

× I think yes because when I am sad I always hear a good song and that that would make me feel more relaxed and happy.

✓ I think so because when I am sad, I always listen to a good song, and that makes me feel more relaxed and happy.

The phrase 'I think yes' is unnatural; 'I think so' is better. 'Hear' should be 'listen to' when referring to actively engaging with music. The repeated 'that that' is a typo. Also, the sentence needs commas for clarity.