Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'had the patience for singing'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý đến số nhiều và số ít (ví dụ: 'connections' và 'group').

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions when I feel stressed or upset. I often go to karaoke rooms with my friends, and singing together helps us feel more connected.

제안: Bạn cần trả lời rõ ràng và tránh những câu không liên quan hoặc không rõ nghĩa như 'those are four persons who want to purchase a career in singing'. Hãy tập trung trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lặp từ như 'like'.

예시: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. I just enjoy singing as a hobby and don't plan to pursue a professional career in it.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh những cụm từ không tự nhiên như 'think for myself'. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu rõ ràng hơn.

예시: I usually sing to myself when I'm taking a shower or cooking because it's one of my hobbies. However, at parties like birthdays, I like to sing for my family and friends to share my happiness with them.

제안: Bạn nên chia câu rõ ràng hơn và sử dụng liên từ phù hợp để câu trả lời mạch lạc. Ví dụ, tách câu thành hai phần và dùng 'because' hoặc 'and' để nối ý. Ngoài ra, chú ý ngữ pháp như 'is also connects' nên là 'it also connects'.

예시: I think singing brings happiness to everyone, especially when we are feeling down. It also connects us with friends and lifts our spirits throughout the day.

× Well yes, I'm the person who had the patience for singing and I think it's a way for me to express my feelings, my emotions when I feel stress or upset.

✓ Well yes, I'm the person who has the patience for singing and I think it's a way for me to express my feelings, my emotions when I feel stress or upset.

The verb 'had' is in the past tense, but the sentence refers to a current state. The correct verb tense is present simple 'has' to match the present context.

× And I usually go karaoke rooms with my friends and after that I feel a strong connections between everyone in Group.

✓ And I usually go to karaoke rooms with my friends and after that I feel a strong connection between everyone in the group.

The phrase 'go karaoke rooms' is missing the preposition 'to'. 'Connections' should be singular 'connection' to agree with 'a strong'. 'Group' should be preceded by 'the' and be lowercase.

× Well, I have never taken singing lessons formally.

✓ Well, I have never taken singing lessons formally.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× I think those are four persons who want to purchase a career in singing.

✓ I think there are four people who want to pursue a career in singing.

'Persons' is less common; 'people' is preferred. 'Purchase a career' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'pursue a career'. Also, 'there are' is needed to introduce the existence of people.

× Like became an artist while I'm enjoying singing just for fun.

✓ Like becoming an artist while I'm enjoying singing just for fun.

The verb 'became' is past tense and does not fit here. The gerund 'becoming' is correct to express the idea of aspiring to be an artist.

× Like it's one of my hobbies like.

✓ Like it's one of my hobbies.

The repeated 'like' at the end is unnecessary and should be removed for clarity.

× Actually, on a daily basis, I usually think for myself while taking showers or cooking because it's one of my hobbies.

✓ Actually, on a daily basis, I usually sing to myself while taking showers or cooking because it's one of my hobbies.

The phrase 'think for myself' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is 'sing to myself'.

× But when it comes to parties, like birthday parties, I always want to sing for my family, my friends, to show them my happiness.

✓ But when it comes to parties, like birthday parties, I always want to sing for my family and my friends to show them my happiness.

The comma before 'to show them my happiness' is unnecessary; 'and' is preferred to connect 'family' and 'friends'.

× I think singing brings happiness to everyone, especially when we are feeling down is also connects us with friends and lift our spirits and our day.

✓ I think singing brings happiness to everyone, especially when we are feeling down. It also connects us with friends and lifts our spirits and our day.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper conjunctions and verb agreement. Splitting into two sentences and correcting verb forms improves clarity and grammar.