Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần sử dụng thì hiện tại đơn cho thói quen và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'helped' nên là 'helps'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh dùng cụm từ không tự nhiên như 'recharge my battery'. Bạn nên dùng các từ vựng đơn giản, tự nhiên và câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ.

예시: Yes, I really like singing because it helps me relax after a stressful day at school. Also, I enjoy singing because it can make other people feel happy and cheerful.

제안: Bạn cần tránh sử dụng từ không chính xác như 'I have a knife for singing' (có thể bạn muốn nói 'I have a knack for singing'). Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng thì quá khứ đơn cho hành động đã xảy ra. Hãy luyện tập nói trôi chảy hơn và dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc.

예시: Yes, when I was a child, I learned how to sing from my teacher because I have a knack for singing. I want to improve my skills so that I can earn money from singing in the future.

제안: Bạn nên dùng từ đúng như 'appreciate' nên là 'appreciation' hoặc 'show my love and appreciation'. Câu 'make them live up mood and feel it' không tự nhiên, bạn nên nói 'make them feel happy' hoặc 'lift their mood'. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể hơn.

예시: I want to sing for my parents because I want to show my love and appreciation for them. Also, singing can lift their mood and make them feel happy.

제안: Bạn nên dùng từ đúng như 'pupil' không phù hợp, nên dùng 'people'. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng các liên từ hợp lý. Ví dụ, 'a melody in a nice in song have people to live up mood' không đúng ngữ pháp và không tự nhiên. Hãy nói rõ ràng hơn về lợi ích của việc hát và dùng từ vựng phù hợp.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because a nice melody can lift their mood and help them reduce stress.

× Yes, I really love singing because it helped me to recharge my battery after a stressful starting at school.

✓ Yes, I really love singing because it helps me to recharge my battery after a stressful start at school.

The sentence mixes past tense 'helped' with present tense 'love'. Since the student is talking about a current habit, present tense 'helps' is appropriate. Also, 'starting' should be 'start' as a noun here.

× Yes, I really love singing because it helped me to recharge my battery after a stressful starting at school.

✓ Yes, I really love singing because it helps me to recharge my battery after a stressful start at school.

The phrase 'starting at school' is incorrect; 'start at school' is the correct noun phrase to describe the beginning of school.

× Umm yes, when I was a child I uh, have learned how to sing from my teacher because uh, I have a knife for singing so I want to improve my singing skill to earn money in the future.

✓ Umm yes, when I was a child I learned how to sing from my teacher because I have a knack for singing so I want to improve my singing skills to earn money in the future.

The present perfect 'have learned' is incorrect when referring to a specific past time 'when I was a child'; simple past 'learned' is correct. Also, 'knife' is a wrong word; it should be 'knack'. 'Skill' should be plural 'skills' when referring generally.

× Umm yes, when I was a child I uh, have learned how to sing from my teacher because uh, I have a knife for singing so I want to improve my singing skill to earn money in the future.

✓ Umm yes, when I was a child I learned how to sing from my teacher because I have a knack for singing so I want to improve my singing skills to earn money in the future.

The word 'knife' is a noun meaning a cutting tool, but the intended word is 'knack', meaning a talent or skill. This is a vocabulary error affecting meaning.

× Umm I want to sing for my parents because I want to show my love and appreciate for them.

✓ Umm I want to sing for my parents because I want to show my love and appreciation for them.

The word 'appreciate' is a verb, but here a noun 'appreciation' is needed to match 'love' and the sentence structure.

× Moreover, I want to make them live up mood and feel it.

✓ Moreover, I want to lift their mood and make them feel it.

The phrase 'make them live up mood' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'lift their mood'. Also, 'feel it' is vague; 'make them feel it' clarifies the intention.

× Yes, of course singing can make pupil have a sense of happiness because I think a melody in a nice in song have people to live up mood and moreover it have to people reduce stress.

✓ Yes, of course singing can make pupils have a sense of happiness because I think a melody in a nice song helps people lift their mood and moreover it helps people reduce stress.

The word 'pupil' should be plural 'pupils' to agree with 'people'. 'Have' should be 'helps' to agree with singular 'melody'. 'Live up mood' is incorrect; 'lift their mood' is correct. 'Have to people reduce stress' is incorrect; 'helps people reduce stress' is correct.