Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Make your answer more coherent by finishing your thoughts clearly and using linking words to connect ideas. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences and use more precise vocabulary.

예시: Yes, I like singing because it is a fantastic way to relieve stress and express my emotions. I especially enjoy singing songs with my friends in a group, which makes the experience more fun. Additionally, I often sing my favourite motivational song to boost my mood when I feel down.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Focus on clarity by using simple sentences and correct grammar. Directly answer the question and provide specific details about your singing lessons, using linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I learned how to sing in secondary school. We had a special singing class every day during our music period. These lessons helped me improve my singing skills and gave me more confidence to perform.

제안: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and express your feelings more naturally and precisely.

예시: I want to sing for my father because he is my biggest motivation. He has always supported me and encouraged me to succeed. Singing for him would be a way to show my gratitude and express my emotions.

제안: Avoid repeating words and try to expand your answer with specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their feelings. For example, singing your favourite song can motivate you and improve your mood, making you feel more positive.

× Yes, singing is fantastic way to leave stress and describe your emotions.

✓ Yes, singing is a fantastic way to relieve stress and describe your emotions.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'fantastic way'. Also, 'leave stress' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'relieve stress'. Articles are necessary before singular countable nouns to specify them properly.

× I love singing and I enjoy enjoy singing songs with my friends in a group.

✓ I love singing and I enjoy singing songs with my friends in a group.

The word 'enjoy' is repeated unnecessarily. Repetition of words without purpose is a grammatical error and should be avoided for clarity and correctness.

× Moreover, I also sing my motivational motivational song which I like the most as when I.

✓ Moreover, I also sing my motivational song which I like the most.

The adjective 'motivational' is repeated twice unnecessarily. Also, the sentence is incomplete and should end properly. Repetition of adjectives is incorrect and makes the sentence unclear.

× Yes, I got glasses of singing and my secondary school as they were I we were having total salmon period in a day and there was one particularly 1 singing class every day to increase our singing and also which gives us confidence to sing.

✓ Yes, I took singing classes in my secondary school as we had a total of seven periods in a day and there was one particular singing class every day to improve our singing and also to give us confidence to sing.

The original sentence has multiple errors including incorrect word choice ('glasses' instead of 'classes'), unclear phrases ('total salmon period'), and poor sentence structure. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× As I earlier told singing is best way to express your emotions.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, singing is the best way to express your emotions.

The sentence lacks the definite article 'the' before 'best way' and the phrase 'I earlier told' is awkward; 'I mentioned earlier' is more appropriate. Proper use of articles and pronouns improves sentence clarity.

× I really want to sing for my father in future as he's only motivation who made me successful in my life and he always stayed behind my behind me and always told me that I am with you so I will try to sing with for him.

✓ I really want to sing for my father in the future as he's the only motivation who made me successful in my life. He has always stood behind me and always told me that he is with me, so I will try to sing for him.

The sentence has multiple pronoun and article errors: missing 'the' before 'future' and 'only motivation', incorrect phrase 'stayed behind my behind me' corrected to 'stood behind me', and incorrect pronoun usage in 'I am with you' changed to 'he is with me'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× Yes, of course singing can bring can bring happiness to people as singing your favorite song can also motivate and keep your mood good.

✓ Yes, of course, singing can bring happiness to people as singing your favourite song can also motivate and keep your mood good.

The phrase 'can bring' is repeated unnecessarily. Removing the repetition corrects the modal verb usage. Also, adding commas improves readability.