Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct grammar and sentence structure. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise. For example, say 'I really enjoy singing because it is one of my favorite hobbies. Singing with my friends and family makes me very happy and helps me relieve stress.'

예시: I really enjoy singing because it is one of my favorite hobbies. Singing with my friends and family makes me very happy and helps me relieve stress.

제안: Focus on clear and correct sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, say 'Yes, I am currently learning to sing in my guitar class. While playing the guitar, my teacher teaches me how to control my voice and reach high notes. This helps me improve my singing skills.'

예시: Yes, I am currently learning to sing in my guitar class. While playing the guitar, my teacher teaches me how to control my voice and reach high notes. This helps me improve my singing skills.

제안: Make your answer more structured and clear. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. For example, say 'I usually sing for my friends and family because singing is my hobby. I enjoy singing for fun and it helps us have a good time together.'

예시: I usually sing for my friends and family because singing is my hobby. I enjoy singing for fun and it helps us have a good time together.

제안: Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to organize your answer. For example, say 'Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to spend time together, reduce stress, and express their emotions.'

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to spend time together, reduce stress, and express their emotions.

× Yes, I really enjoy how to sing because singing is one of my favorite hobby.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing because singing is one of my favorite hobbies.

The phrase 'enjoy how to sing' is incorrect; 'enjoy' should be followed by a verb in the -ing form, so 'enjoy singing' is correct. Also, 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' because it refers to one of multiple hobbies.

× Yes, I really enjoy how to sing because singing is one of my favorite hobby.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing because singing is one of my favorite hobbies.

The noun 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' when referring to one among many favorites.

× When I sing I can't make myself very happy and also it doesn't stress before like doing what I'm singing and I just singing with my friends and my family that can create more happiness with us and we just have fun together.

✓ When I sing, I feel very happy and it helps me reduce stress. I just sing with my friends and family, which creates more happiness for us and we have fun together.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'Can't make myself very happy' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I feel very happy.' Also, 'it doesn't stress before like doing what I'm singing' is unclear; it should be 'it helps me reduce stress.' The sentence is broken into clearer parts for better understanding.

× Yes, as right now I learn how to sing when I doing at my guitar class because I'm studying there when I'm singing doing when I'm playing a guitar and my teacher teach me how to think slowly and reach the highest voice.

✓ Yes, right now I am learning how to sing in my guitar class because I study there. When I sing while playing the guitar, my teacher teaches me how to breathe slowly and reach the highest notes.

The sentence has incorrect verb forms and tenses. 'I learn' should be 'I am learning' for current action. 'When I doing' is incorrect; it should be 'when I am doing' or better 'when I sing while playing.' 'My teacher teach' should be 'my teacher teaches.' Also, 'think slowly' is likely a mistake for 'breathe slowly.'

× Yes, as right now I learn how to sing when I doing at my guitar class because I'm studying there when I'm singing doing when I'm playing a guitar and my teacher teach me how to think slowly and reach the highest voice.

✓ Yes, right now I am learning how to sing in my guitar class because I study there. When I sing while playing the guitar, my teacher teaches me how to breathe slowly and reach the highest notes.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'in' for classes or courses.

× And it's so like to improve my voice and make my way very good and very clearly doing the.

✓ And I really like improving my voice and making my singing very good and clear.

The phrase 'it's so like' is incorrect; it should be 'I really like.' 'Make my way very good and very clearly' is ungrammatical; it should be 'making my singing very good and clear.'

× For me, I just sing in for my friends, my family for my example, like I just singing from fun and just singing from like my hobbies.

✓ For me, I just sing for my friends and my family. For example, I sing for fun and because it is my hobby.

The preposition 'in for' is incorrect; it should be just 'for.' Also, 'singing from fun' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'sing for fun.'

× For me, I just sing in for my friends, my family for my example, like I just singing from fun and just singing from like my hobbies.

✓ For me, I just sing for my friends and my family. For example, I just sing for fun and as one of my hobbies.

The phrase 'I just singing' is incorrect; after 'I' the verb should be in base form 'sing.'

× So I just sing from fun and make everyone enjoy when I'm singing and we just have some lots of time enjoying together doing the thing and we have to create time.

✓ So I just sing for fun and try to make everyone enjoy when I am singing. We have a lot of time enjoying together and creating memories.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'Sing from fun' should be 'sing for fun.' 'Make everyone enjoy' is better as 'try to make everyone enjoy.' 'Some lots of time' is incorrect; 'a lot of time' is correct. 'Doing the thing' is unclear and omitted for clarity.

× We have to create time.

✓ We try to create time together.

'Have to' implies obligation which may not be intended. 'Try to' is more appropriate to express effort to spend time together.

× Yes, I believe thing is bringing happiness to people because like is it allowing to people a thing together has more time together create more fun time together redoing stress and just be more fun and when singing just like showing your emotional and also like making your.

✓ Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people because it allows people to be together, spend more time together, create more fun, reduce stress, and express emotions.

The original sentence is very unclear and ungrammatical. It is restructured for clarity and correctness. 'Redoing stress' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'reduce stress.' 'Showing your emotional' should be 'express emotions.'