Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Do you like singing? Why?
수험생
Yes, I really like singing because it's a form of activity that helps me relax and showcase my talents. I started singing when I was 5. I have this natural ability to sing.
시험관
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
수험생
Yes, I've learned how to sing. I was enrolled in a Dance Academy by my mom when she discovered I have this natural ability to sing. So in order to improve, she thought it was nice I get to Dance Academy. That was when I was 10.
시험관
Who do you want to sing for?
수험생
I want to sing for the congregation in my church cathedral because the acoustics there are truly magnificent, which will help my vocal ability. Moreover, singing to such a great audience will make me sing and become more visible. I've always sung in my local church and I enjoy it.
시험관
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
수험생
Sure, singing can bring happiness to people because it's a source of relief for anxiety. Moreover, people going through depression can use singing as a means to feel better. For instance, someone can be relieved by a melodious song from a singer.
평가
총점
Part 1
Do you like singing? Why?
점수: 75.0제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating similar ideas and try to use more varied vocabulary. Also, linking your sentences with connectors would improve coherence.
예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express myself creatively. I've loved singing since I was five, as I discovered I have a natural talent for it.
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
점수: 70.0제안: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and contains some awkward phrasing. Try to organise your ideas logically and use linking words to connect them. Also, be careful with word choice to avoid confusion (e.g., 'Dance Academy' for singing lessons).
예시: Yes, I have taken singing lessons. When I was ten, my mother enrolled me in a music academy to help me develop my natural singing ability.
Who do you want to sing for?
점수: 80.0제안: Your answer is detailed and relevant, but some sentences could be more natural and concise. Use linking words effectively to connect your ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, try to vary your vocabulary to sound more natural.
예시: I would like to sing for my church congregation because the cathedral's excellent acoustics enhance my voice. Additionally, performing for such an audience motivates me and helps me gain more exposure. I've always enjoyed singing at my local church.
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
점수: 85.0제안: Your answer is well-structured and relevant, but you could improve it by using more varied vocabulary and linking phrases to make it sound more natural and fluent.
예시: Absolutely, singing can bring joy to people as it helps relieve anxiety. Furthermore, those experiencing depression often find comfort in singing or listening to melodious songs, which can lift their spirits.
문법
× So in order to improve, she thought it was nice I get to Dance Academy.
✓ So in order to improve, she thought it was nice for me to go to Dance Academy.
The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I get to Dance Academy' which is ungrammatical. The correct modal verb construction here is 'for me to go to Dance Academy' to express purpose or intention. Using 'get to' is informal and does not fit the intended meaning. The suggestion improves clarity and grammatical correctness.
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