Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，句子结构混乱，缺乏连贯性。建议简化句子，直接表达观点，并用连接词使内容连贯。

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress after a busy day. Moreover, singing allows me to connect with others and make new friends.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，逻辑混乱。建议直接回答问题，避免重复，并用简单句表达原因。

예시: No, I have never formally learned how to sing. However, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and socialize with others.

제안: 回答表达了观点，但句子较长且结构不够清晰。建议分句表达，使用连接词使内容更连贯。

예시: I would like to sing for my parents because they are the most important people in my life. They have supported me and taught me valuable life lessons.

제안: 回答中存在用词错误和表达不自然的问题。建议使用准确词汇，避免重复，并举具体例子。

예시: Yes, singing can bring happiness to people. For example, people often sing at birthday parties to express their good wishes and joy.

× Well, yes I do. I like singing. Well, there are several reasons. First, singing can help me to release my stress because I'm really busy with performing operations as a system with my tutor in my daily lives actually seeing and help me to make more friends because it is a really good.

✓ Well, yes I do. I like singing. Well, there are several reasons. First, singing can help me to release my stress because I'm really busy performing operations as a system with my tutor in my daily life, actually seeing, and it helps me to make more friends because it is really good.

句中“busy with performing operations”中的“with”不必要，且“in my daily lives”应为单数形式“in my daily life”。此外，句子结构混乱，缺少连接词，需调整以使句意清晰。建议去掉“with”，将“lives”改为“life”，并添加适当连接词。

× Well, yes I do. I like singing. Well, there are several reasons. First, singing can help me to release my stress because I'm really busy with performing operations as a system with my tutor in my daily lives actually seeing and help me to make more friends because it is a really good.

✓ Well, yes I do. I like singing. Well, there are several reasons. First, singing can help me to release my stress because I'm really busy performing operations as a system with my tutor in my daily life, and it also helps me to make more friends because it is really good.

原句中“actually seeing and help me to make more friends”连接不当，缺少连词，导致句子不通顺。应使用“and”连接两个动作，使句子结构完整。

× Why would I haven't? I have not learned how to sing but I'm really keen on singing because it can help me to release my stress and also help me to make more friends as although as I'm really good at of singing so they can also build my comfort.

✓ Why haven't I? I have not learned how to sing but I'm really keen on singing because it can help me to release my stress and also help me to make more friends, although I'm not really good at singing, so it can also build my confidence.

“Why would I haven't?”语法错误，正确表达应为“Why haven't I?”。此外，“as although as”用法错误，应简化为“although”。“good at of singing”中“of”多余，应去掉。最后，“build my comfort”表达不准确，应为“build my confidence”。

× Why would I haven't? I have not learned how to sing but I'm really keen on singing because it can help me to release my stress and also help me to make more friends as although as I'm really good at of singing so they can also build my comfort.

✓ Why haven't I? I have not learned how to sing but I'm really keen on singing because it can help me to release my stress and also help me to make more friends, although I'm not really good at singing, so it can also build my confidence.

“good at of singing”中“of”是不正确的介词搭配，应去掉“of”，正确用法是“good at singing”。

× Well, that would say definitely to my parents because for me my parents are the most important people in my life that brought me out and strength and shape my lifestyle and patterns and also teach me to be a good person.

✓ Well, I would definitely say to my parents because, for me, my parents are the most important people in my life who brought me up, gave me strength, shaped my lifestyle and habits, and also taught me to be a good person.

原句结构混乱，“that brought me out and strength and shape my lifestyle and patterns and also teach me”缺少主谓一致和连接词，且“brought me out”应为“brought me up”，“strength”应为“gave me strength”，“patterns”应为“habits”。需要调整句子结构，使其语法正确且表达清晰。

× Well, that would say definitely to my parents because for me my parents are the most important people in my life that brought me out and strength and shape my lifestyle and patterns and also teach me to be a good person.

✓ Well, I would definitely say to my parents because, for me, my parents are the most important people in my life who brought me up, gave me strength, shaped my lifestyle and habits, and also taught me to be a good person.

“say definitely to my parents”中“say”用法不当，应为“I would definitely say to my parents”。此外，“that brought me out and strength”中“out”应为“up”，“strength”应为“gave me strength”，介词和动词搭配错误。

× Yes, definitely. I think singing can definitely bring happiness to people and it can also be convened its gratitude to others. For example, some people might pretend to prefer to sing in a birthday party to express their blessing and happiness.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think singing can definitely bring happiness to people and it can also convey gratitude to others. For example, some people might prefer to sing at a birthday party to express their blessings and happiness.

“be convened its gratitude”用词错误，应为“convey gratitude”。“in a birthday party”介词用错，应为“at a birthday party”。“blessing”应为复数形式“blessings”，因为表达的是祝福的意思。

× Yes, definitely. I think singing can definitely bring happiness to people and it can also be convened its gratitude to others. For example, some people might pretend to prefer to sing in a birthday party to express their blessing and happiness.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think singing can definitely bring happiness to people and it can also convey gratitude to others. For example, some people might prefer to sing at a birthday party to express their blessings and happiness.

“in a birthday party”中的介词“in”用法不当，正确用法是“at a birthday party”，表示在某个特定场合。