Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时应避免重复表达，语言更自然流畅。可以简化表达，突出重点。

예시: Yes, I love singing because music is my passion, and it makes me feel joyful and relaxed.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议简洁表达并注意语法准确。

예시: Yes, I have learned singing by watching many online videos to improve my voice, although I'm still a beginner.

제안: 回答缺乏连贯性，建议使用连接词使表达更流畅，同时避免重复。

예시: I want to sing for my parents, friends, and even strangers because as the lead singer of my rock band, I enjoy performing in front of diverse audiences.

제안: 回答过于简短且有重复，建议丰富内容并避免重复。

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to both the singer and the audience because it expresses emotions and creates a joyful atmosphere.

× Yes, I enjoy singing because I'm very fanatical about music and also I enjoy the feeling when I sing.

✓ Yes, I enjoy singing because I'm very passionate about music and also I enjoy the feeling when I sing.

这里“fanatical”虽然语法上没错，但用词不当，建议用“passionate”更符合表达热爱音乐的语境。

× Yes, sure, I watched a lot of online video to learn how to sing and how to how to make my voice more appealing even even though I'm actually I'm not very good at singing.

✓ Yes, sure, I have watched a lot of online videos to learn how to sing and how to make my voice more appealing even though I'm actually not very good at singing.

这里时态应使用现在完成时“have watched”，因为动作发生在过去并对现在有影响；“video”应为复数“videos”；去掉重复的“how to”。

× Yes, sure, I watched a lot of online video to learn how to sing and how to how to make my voice more appealing even even though I'm actually I'm not very good at singing.

✓ Yes, sure, I have watched a lot of online videos to learn how to sing and how to make my voice more appealing even though I'm actually not very good at singing.

“video”应使用复数形式“videos”，因为前面有“a lot of”，表示数量多。

× And maybe my parents and my friends and also strangers because I'm I'm the senior in my rock band, so I'd like to sing in front of many strange people. So I'm really enjoying it.

✓ Maybe my parents, my friends, and also strangers, because I'm the senior member of my rock band, so I'd like to sing in front of many strangers. I'm really enjoying it.

句子结构混乱，重复使用“and”，应使用逗号分隔；“senior”后应加“member”使表达完整；“strange people”应改为“strangers”，更符合语境。

× So I'm really enjoying it.

✓ So I really enjoy it.

这里表达习惯用一般现在时“enjoy”，表示经常性的喜好，而不是正在进行的动作。

× Yes, definitely both singer and listener can be can be happy when when somebody is singing.

✓ Yes, definitely both singers and listeners can be happy when somebody is singing.

“singer”和“listener”应使用复数形式，表示泛指；去掉重复的“can be”和“when”。