Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như cách diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, mạch lạc và thêm liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel calm and relaxed after a busy day. It is one of my favorite hobbies that allows me to unwind.

제안: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và giải thích ngắn gọn, tránh câu quá dài và rối.

예시: No, I have never learned how to sing formally. I usually sing for fun because I think singing is more of a hobby than a necessary skill.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên tổ chức câu trả lời theo cấu trúc rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu nói mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I prefer to sing for my family because I feel shy singing in front of strangers. Singing at home makes me feel comfortable and confident.

제안: Bạn đã trả lời khá tốt nhưng câu hơi dài và có một số lỗi nhỏ. Hãy sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và thêm liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

예시: Definitely, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people relax and reduce stress after a busy day.

× I have to say that singing is one of the most my favorite things because I feel like when I sing I feel really calm and feel relaxed like after a busy day is really help me to take it easy.

✓ I have to say that singing is one of my favorite things because I feel like when I sing I feel really calm and relaxed, like after a busy day it really helps me to take it easy.

The phrase 'one of the most my favorite things' is incorrect because 'most' and 'my' are both quantifiers and cannot be used together here. The correct phrase is 'one of my favorite things'. Also, 'is really help me' should be 'it really helps me' to maintain subject-verb agreement and correct sentence structure.

× I never learned how to sing, I just I just sing when whenever I like and I want to because I think singing is not really important skill for everyone that they should learn.

✓ I have never learned how to sing; I just sing whenever I like and want to because I think singing is not a really important skill that everyone should learn.

The sentence uses 'never learned' which is acceptable but 'I just I just sing when whenever I like and I want to' is redundant and awkward. Also, 'important skill for everyone that they should learn' is incorrect; it should be 'a really important skill that everyone should learn' to include the article 'a' and correct relative clause.

× I think it's just stop with the hobby or favorite.

✓ I think it should just stop as a hobby or favorite activity.

The phrase 'just stop with the hobby or favorite' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'Stop with' is not the correct preposition here, and 'favorite' needs a noun to modify. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and uses appropriate prepositions and nouns.

× I should well I just want to sing for my family because I really shy when I have to stand in front of people or or listen like I when I stand on the stage, I feel like I can say or I can sing anything.

✓ Well, I just want to sing for my family because I am really shy when I have to stand in front of people or listen. When I stand on the stage, I feel like I can say or sing anything.

The use of 'I should well' is incorrect; 'should' is unnecessary here. Also, 'I really shy' lacks the verb 'am' to form the correct present tense. The sentence is also run-on and needs to be split for clarity.

× So I just Can't Sing in my comfort zone.

✓ So I just can't sing outside my comfort zone.

The phrase 'in my comfort zone' contradicts the intended meaning. The student means they can only sing within their comfort zone, so 'outside my comfort zone' is the correct phrase. Also, 'Can't Sing' should be lowercase 'can't sing'.

× Definitely, I strongly believe that singing can bring happiness to people because it can help people feel relaxed and take it easy when they get over a long day with a busy and it can reduce some stress.

✓ Definitely, I strongly believe that singing can bring happiness to people because it can help them feel relaxed and take it easy after a long, busy day, and it can reduce some stress.

The phrase 'when they get over a long day with a busy' is incorrect and awkward. It should be 'after a long, busy day'. Also, 'help people feel' is better as 'help them feel' to avoid repetition. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper use of quantifiers and prepositions.