Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and contains repetition. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid repeating the same idea, and provide specific reasons why you like singing. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it allows me to express my emotions and connect with others. For instance, singing romantic songs helps me share feelings of love and happiness with my friends.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and includes irrelevant information (mentioning nursing). Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details about your singing lessons or experiences. Avoid unrelated topics and use linking words to organise your answer.

예시: Yes, I have taken singing lessons since I was a child because I was fascinated by music. Moreover, I practiced regularly to improve my voice and hope to perform on TV one day.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and contains some unclear phrases (e.g., 'seeing' instead of 'singing'). Make sure to answer directly, avoid repetition, and provide specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: I want to sing for everyone because music can bring people together. For example, singing in front of an audience helps me express my feelings and boosts my confidence.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases and hesitations. Try to give a clear and structured response with a topic sentence, followed by specific reasons or examples. Avoid hesitations and ensure your vocabulary is accurate.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it lifts people's spirits. However, sometimes singing sad songs helps people express their feelings and feel better afterwards.

× I love singing and it's really romantic. You can share them with others and and I love singing.

✓ I love singing and it's really romantic. You can share it with others and I love singing.

The pronoun 'them' is incorrect because 'singing' is a singular noun and should be referred to as 'it'. Using 'them' implies a plural noun, which is not the case here.

× Of course, I love learning things when I was little.

✓ Of course, I loved learning things when I was little.

The verb 'love' should be in the past tense 'loved' to match the past time reference 'when I was little'. This maintains tense consistency in the sentence.

× Oh, singing really attracts me and I want to be a star on TV singing to everybody, spreading the love around each other.

✓ Oh, singing really attracts me and I want to be a star on TV singing to everybody, spreading love among each other.

The phrase 'around each other' is incorrect here. The correct preposition is 'among' when referring to a group interacting mutually. Also, 'the love' is unnecessary; 'love' without 'the' is more natural in this context.

× I want to sing for everybody. I think everybody should be confident and seeing can help me express my emotions and build my confidence.

✓ I want to sing for everybody. I think everybody should be confident and singing can help me express my emotions and build my confidence.

The word 'seeing' is a typo or incorrect form; it should be 'singing' to match the context of the conversation about singing.

× Of course seeing can bring happiness to people and when, but sometimes seeing can bring sadness to people.

✓ Of course singing can bring happiness to people, but sometimes singing can bring sadness to people.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect and should be 'singing' to maintain the topic. Also, the phrase 'and when,' is incomplete and unnecessary, so it is removed for clarity.

× And when you're sad, you can try to sing some happy songs when you are No, no, not sad, yes.

✓ And when you're sad, you can try to sing some happy songs. No, no, not sad, yes.

The sentence is confusing and lacks proper structure. Splitting it into two sentences improves clarity. The phrase 'when you are No, no, not sad, yes' is unclear and seems to be a hesitation or correction, so it is separated for better understanding.