Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答缺少完整的句子结构，建议用完整的句子直接回答问题，并且补充具体细节。例如，可以先表达你是否喜欢唱歌，然后说明原因。

예시: Yes, I like singing because my mother is a music teacher and she has always encouraged me to learn singing professionally.

제안: 回答不够连贯且有语法错误，建议用完整句子表达是否学过唱歌，并说明原因，避免无意义的词汇。

예시: I have learned a little bit of singing, but not professionally because my mother was very busy teaching and I was not very interested at that time.

제안: 回答较好，但句子结构可以更自然流畅，建议使用连接词使表达更连贯，并且注意语法。

예시: I prefer singing with my friends because singing with my mom feels like being judged by a teacher, but with friends, we just enjoy joyful moments together.

제안: 回答不够完整且表达不清楚，建议直接回答问题并用具体例子支持观点，注意句子完整和逻辑连贯。

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness. For example, when I was an intern at the government, we sang together during breaks with participants from other countries, which made us feel joyful and connected.

× Influenced by my mother.

✓ I was influenced by my mother.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb, making it a sentence fragment. Adding 'I was' completes the sentence structure, making it grammatically correct.

× My mom is a music teacher at the Senior High in my hometown and she always wants to teach me how to sing, like professionally.

✓ My mom is a music teacher at the senior high school in my hometown, and she always wants to teach me how to sing professionally.

'Senior High' should be 'senior high school' to specify the institution. Also, 'like professionally' is incorrect; 'professionally' alone is sufficient and more natural here.

× Add lunch a little bit.

✓ I practiced singing a little bit during lunch.

The original sentence is unclear and incomplete. Clarifying the action and context makes the sentence meaningful and grammatically correct.

× But I did not learn professionally, even though my mom wanted to teach me about a professional singer.

✓ But I did not learn professionally, even though my mom wanted to teach me to be a professional singer.

The phrase 'teach me about a professional singer' is incorrect; it should be 'teach me to be a professional singer' to express the intended meaning.

× I was not into that because when I was a child, my mom was so busy with teaching students and sometimes she brought me to the school. But.

✓ I was not into that because when I was a child, my mom was very busy teaching students, and sometimes she brought me to school.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'But.' which is incomplete. Removing 'But.' and refining the sentence improves clarity and correctness.

× If possible I enjoy singing with my friends because if it's like with my mom, it would be like same to a teacher who would judge you.

✓ If possible, I enjoy singing with my friends because if it's with my mom, it would be like singing for a teacher who would judge you.

The phrase 'like same to a teacher' is incorrect. It should be 'like singing for a teacher' to convey the intended meaning. Also, adding commas improves readability.

× But if I sing for my friends, we would just enjoy the little times of our own and it is just having joyful moment.

✓ But if I sing for my friends, we just enjoy our time together, and it is a joyful moment.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing. 'Little times of our own' is unnatural; 'our time together' is clearer. Also, 'having joyful moment' should be 'a joyful moment'.

× Yes, I do believe in that, especially when we're working as an intern at the government.

✓ Yes, I do believe that, especially when we were working as interns at the government office.

'Believe in that' should be 'believe that' for this context. Also, 'we're working' should be past tense 'we were working' to match the past context. 'An intern' should be plural 'interns' if referring to multiple people, and 'at the government' is incomplete; 'at the government office' is clearer.

× We have so many participants from other countries and during the breaks we rested time with the same together and we really had a great time when we were.

✓ We had many participants from other countries, and during the breaks, we spent time together and really had a great time.

The original sentence is confusing and incomplete. 'Rested time with the same together' is incorrect; it should be 'spent time together'. Also, 'when we were' is incomplete and should be removed or completed.