Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and clear by avoiding redundancy and correcting grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you like singing and mention your comfort level singing in front of others.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing, but mostly when I'm alone because I feel shy singing in front of others. However, I love how singing connects me to music and helps me relax.

제안: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is a bit unclear. Try to use correct verb tenses and complete your sentences. Also, organize your ideas logically using linking words. For example, mention your piano experience first, then express your wish to learn singing.

예시: No, I have never learned how to sing formally, but I have learned to play the piano and am currently practicing it. I hope to take singing lessons in the future because I enjoy singing when I'm alone.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words to make it more coherent. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily. For example, explain why you want to sing for your fiancé and how it would surprise him.

예시: I would like to sing for my fiancé because he often sings for me and has a beautiful voice. I enjoy his singing a lot, so I want to surprise him by learning to sing myself.

제안: Your answer is thoughtful but could be more concise and better structured. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid awkward phrasing. Also, try to be more specific about how singing brings happiness.

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it is a form of art that connects people to their emotions and helps them relax. Moreover, singing can bring people together and create shared joyful memories.

× I like to sing but I believe I am a bathroom singer which is similar to I can sing when I am alone but I am I am not able to sing in front of many people.

✓ I like to sing but I believe I am a bathroom singer, which means I can sing when I am alone but I am not able to sing in front of many people.

The phrase 'which is similar to' is incorrectly used to explain the meaning. It should be 'which means' to clarify the definition. Also, the repeated 'I am' is redundant and should be removed.

× Even I am not able to sing in front of my friend.

✓ I am not even able to sing in front of my friend.

The placement of 'even' is incorrect. It should be placed before 'able' to properly emphasize the inability to sing in front of a friend.

× I like singing very much because it's connect with the music.

✓ I like singing very much because it connects with the music.

The verb 'connect' needs to be in the third person singular form 'connects' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, the preposition 'with' is correct here, but the verb form was incorrect.

× No, I have not had learned how to sing, although I learned how to play piano and because I am practicing right now as well.

✓ No, I have not learned how to sing, although I learned how to play the piano and I am practicing right now as well.

The phrase 'have not had learned' is incorrect; the correct present perfect form is 'have not learned'. Also, 'play piano' should be 'play the piano' as the instrument requires the definite article.

× But I hope I would have learned about the singing because I really like to like to sing when I am alone and it.

✓ But I hope I will learn to sing because I really like to sing when I am alone.

The sentence is awkward and contains repetition ('like to like to'). The future tense 'will learn' fits better than 'would have learned' for expressing hope. The phrase 'about the singing' is unnecessary and 'and it' is incomplete and should be removed.

× I would like to sing for my fiance because most of the time he's singing for me as he know how to sing and he has a really good voice.

✓ I would like to sing for my fiancé because most of the time he's singing for me as he knows how to sing and he has a really good voice.

The verb 'know' should be 'knows' to agree with the third person singular subject 'he'. Also, 'fiance' should have an accent as 'fiancé' for correct spelling.

× I really enjoy his singing so I just want to surprise him sometime if I can learn singing.

✓ I really enjoy his singing, so I just want to surprise him sometime if I can learn to sing.

The phrase 'learn singing' is incorrect; the correct form is 'learn to sing'. Also, a comma is needed before 'so' to separate the clauses.

× Yes, I believe so, because singing is art and any type of art can connect a human to their emotion and it can relax their senses.

✓ Yes, I believe so, because singing is an art and any type of art can connect a person to their emotions and can relax their senses.

The phrase 'singing is art' needs the article 'an' before 'art'. 'A human' is better expressed as 'a person' for naturalness. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match 'their'. The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and removed for clarity.

× So singing can really make people happy or they bring people together and they can share a good memory together through singing.

✓ So singing can really make people happy, bring them together, and help them share good memories through singing.

The conjunction 'or' is incorrect here; it should be 'and' to connect the positive effects of singing. Also, 'a good memory' should be plural 'good memories' to reflect shared experiences. The sentence is restructured for clarity and conciseness.